All Comments on '9 More Minutes'

the rhythmic cycling of the theme throughout your poem. A couple of suggestions that may have made this poem more striking, for me, would have been to change the use of a numeral symbol; 9, to the word; nine and then, I'd have liked you to check your verb conjugation, nine minutes may be a single snooze period but when you write it as 9 minutes, you need to consider this a plural noun, you miss it a couple of times and as a result, your language seems childlike. Thankyou for offering your poem here. -- Carrie Champagne.

I finally swore off the snooze button — those extra few minutes achieved nothing. I was more concerned here with the length of this poem and the short choppy lines. Smooth the edges on this by lengthening lines and breaking it up into stanzas; could be much more appealing.