by manyeyedhydra
Would have been hugely erotic if it hadn't turned out so sad at the end. A very good story though, if that's what you were aiming for.
Very sexy, and skilled writing to boot. I like the horror twist of the story as well, I hope you write non-erotic stories as well or you'd be wasting talent.
The sex was hot; but the consequences were engaging as well. Brings to mind the adage, "be careful what you wish for...you just might get it."
The sex was hot; but the consequences were engaging as well. Brings to mind the adage, "be careful what you wish for...you just might get it."
Still though, can't anyone write a story in which a hot succubus just wants to get laid, no soul, lifeforce, etc? LOL. That way everyone wins?
Among the top ten of my favorite succubi stories; with seduction and moral corruption. The only thing that might have made it better would be more drawn out sex scenes.
And now you all know why they are called demons. Good Story, Bad Succubus! Looks like another case where the little head got the big head in trouble.
This was a hot story, and scary. I must say, the guy got what he had coming for basically killing his friend over some hot nookie.
Excellent horror, excellent sex, excellent humor! It takes a delightful talent to bring those three together, and Hydra has it. Wonderful work.
Great story, great sex. And your demon transformation was classic!
HOLY FECKING HELL!! that was tottally insane!! that was the best story i have EVER READ. I'M seriouse!!
First she was so sweet and innocent (well, as innocent as a succubus can be) and then... Cruel Hydra! Love your succubi-stories.
very, very good. awesome succubus story. though if you get bored good could you write up a long succubus story that actually has a romantic theme. i can't seem to find any that aren't horror.
If someone says they are a demon, it probably means that they do not hold your best interests to heart....
Didn't I just read a story like this? No, it's not Deja Vu. I have yet to read your summoning series, but every story you write is essentially the same story with the same ending, only the title is different.
Not to be harsh, but can you only write one story? Sure you mix of the story a bit, but each story your write is essentially the same as all the others.
It's kinda ridiculous and a shame; a waste of your talent, really.
1 out of 5.
Great story, well told, and with an inevitable ending that felt just right. Thanks for posting about it on the message board!.....Carney
Same story but different character. Do succubus rip the penis off their victims
....might help you keep the names of the characters straight.
...might prevent anonymous from posting silly comments.
I have only one grammatical quibble, the overuse of the word "grab." Apart from that this is excellent on several levels, especially the end. I didn't find it especially erotic, but I found it great as a story.
I'd be interested in a sequel detailing Ennis and his succubus' further adventures in the hereafter.