by RedEmerald
I really loved it. It’s the second best story I’ve read here this year. Keep writing more.
The story thrilled me. It's concept -- true or not -- was excellent and the writing was good. Technically it was also good -- probably about the right length for a beginning story and with nice grammar (that's not always so in these tales.) I hope you continue writing and can find other lawyers not to hurt.
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I am drenched! I managed to hold off coming until the very end - don't know how, but I did. My pussy is still tingling, nearly fifteen minutes later.
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Thank you, thank you, thank you, for one of the best ever stories on here...xx
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PS: If you ever need (half) a bed in Seattle...
Excellent submission for a first-timer. The characters were very well defined, and the story was very hot! I'd like to read more about these women.
Excellent first piece... I hope you don't think you can write something that good and then leave us. :)
What a great story, an in-depth look at a unique situation, and a nice job of exploring the feelings and thoughts associated with it. Great job, would love to read more about these two characters!
An outstanding story for your first attempt. Very well written. Just an absolute great read.
Hope to read many more of your stories soon.
Thank you for such an enjoyable story.
I love every minute of it. Awesome! It was so sweet and sexy The story kept me joked to the very end.
Thank your for an awesome story *thumbs ups*
Great piece of writing for a first time contributor. There is not as many good lesbian stories recently, and I am very pleased that you have helped to change that.
that Coleen Thomas carried for so long. As a first story, who knows. But as a history hopefully develops, wouldn't that be grand.
Fantastic story - perfectly paced, hot as hell and wonderfully sweet too! Cant wait for your next story, please, please don't leave us waiting too long. Top of the list - deservedly so!
Wow, this story is so wonderful! A lot of thoughts are running through my mind, but I can only summarize them by saying "WOW!!!"
One of the best stories I've ever read here - and I'm reading stories from Literotica for a veeery long time now. ;-)
This story only confirms my need to be with another woman for the first time. A friend of mine is reading this story right now and i'm hoping she get as turned on as i did so we can finally cross our boundries that have been keeping us apart. With any luck i'll have a story to write about my first time with another woman.
An absolutely fantastic story. Great prose, fantastic tension and use of words... my comments can't really do it justice. Absolutely wonderful. I'm glad two women can find such happiness x
...for this fabulous story. Lesbian erotica at its best.
And the way the oral scenes were written. Perfect.
That is how cunnilingus is supposed to be portrayed. Delicious.
I rarely leave comments, but I couldn't let this one go without saying something. I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Here's hoping it is only the first of many!
I really enjoyed your story: very well written indeed. Interesting and realistic characters, good plot, well-paced, wonderfully descriptive and extremely erotic.
I loved this story for so many reasons. "RedEmerald", you are good and I hope your first posting is not your last. I was thinking about your footnote at the end. As in any relationship, ones that last are ones where the individuals understand giving without a selfish agenda. Jessie, while it seems she has a personal agenda, she lays it aside to help Diane. She also enjoys what she can until she believes that Diane knows that she, Jessie, really cares. I also enjoyed this because it was based on "reality", someone that you have known for a long time. Watching for your next story.
I've never left a comment before, and I'm also very discerning about what I read. Your story... blew me away. Truly. Their story is beautiful but how much more so with the words of their dance in your hands.
Such a descriptive, intelligent, loving, truly awesome story; erotica in its true sense (as opposed to pornography).
THANK YOU for sharing it with me.
Also for letting us know that 'Jessica' and 'Diane' are still a couple
I find myself thinking that you the Author are likely 'Jessica'
awsome story i loved it cause it wast just o this girl was hot so... it had plot it had background and the chicks a lawyer who dosent like that u really brought actual facts into it to anyway great story tell them thanks for sharing
Brilliant! Fabulous! Romantic! Hot! Everything that makes the perfect story, you are definitely one of my favorites now! keep writing, you're great! Can't wait for your next!
RedEmerald, I am speechless. What a magnificent story. Easily, EASILY the best I've read here. Please give us more.
I have to admit, the ending didn't really work for me, but I know how hard it is to write soppy endings that don't come across as forced and awkward.
As for the story as a whole, I found it sweet, sexy and above all, believable. You're an excellent writer with a knack for description.
Beautifully written. Believable story with a plot. The notion that this is a true story made it even more exciting. I came three times as I read your erotic rendition. This was Hot. Looking forward to more orgasms with you.
I could not put this story down. I cames so many times I'm raw now. :) I can not wait for the next one!
What a story! Thank you for writing this one and the other. I have been searching for new authors to look out for here in Literotica and now there's you. Keep the story coming, please! I love the story themes that you're writing!
I started with page one and wanted to stop to cum at the end of page 1 but made myself read the entire thing i practicly was cumming before i had my pants down.
Brilliant story, I really loved it. Incredible read. Made me cum like crazy.
Absolutely captivating! Some of the best writing I've seen in a while!
Some people write and it's entertaining. Others write and it's like a sculptor or painter, turning the every day into a piece of art that you swear you could stare at forever and a day.
It needs a guilded frame and a room all of its own.
E.A.G
The first time erotica has ever made me touch myself and yearn for the contact that occured between Diane and Jessie was after reading this tantalizing visual display of sex and lust nd of course love. This is an amazing story and I hope to read more
A fantastic read. The depth and detail in which you tell their story is amazing. Anyone who can't appreciate this obviously cannot comprehend true art. I've never been able to come without even touching myself until I read this. Great job!
Just wanted you to know this. This is my favorite story on Lit. It’s an incredibly erotic piece. More so because of the emotions displayed by the girls in the story. That’s what got me. I know you’ve received tremendous praise because of this work, and mine in just one of many, but this, this story, well it moved me. You are an incredible writer, and I say that just not to suck up. May you continue to spin tales such as this.
But this one was too fantastic for me to not leave one! Thanks for the great story....it made me laugh from the beginning and left me with a smile at the end.
A wonderful story, not only fantastic, inspiring sex, but a story that kept you with the writer. Well done. The best lesbian story I've read in a while.
This is THE best story I've read on Literotica in 10 years.
The story is phenomenal but what is even better:
IT IS THE FIRST TIME I HAVE EVER READ A STORY ON THIS SITE
WITHOUT A SINGLE SPELLING OR GRAMMATICAL MISTAKE!!!
I am delighted at the opportunity to read a great story without the annoying interruption of poor spelling, grammar, syntax or even simple punctuation.
Congratulations. Your commitment to excellence is greatly appreciated.
I just couldn't stop. I had to keep reading it to find out what happened. Amazing. In the years that I have been visiting this site I have never left a comment until now. And thanks for the 'where are they now' blurb at the end. Please keep writing.
I am SOOOOOO WET from your story!!!
I am going to pleasure myself tonight with the image of the 2 characters in my mind!
That was incredible, that was the best I have ever read, even if it did take me more than two hours to read it! It is really amazing!
seriously, this was incredible, im so wet, best thing ive read, im not even kidding, thank you so much.
This is an amazing story. I really enjoyed reading it. Please continue to write more stories like this one.
I am in tears and also incredibly aroused after reading your wonderful story. Jessica's emotions are intensely familiar to me, and captured in a way that makes me believe your characters are real. Thank you for a marvelous story that really connected with me. You are a writer of professional quality.
i've made myself come so many times to this beautiful story. so well written and very sexy!!
I have never read a complete story on here, this is the first. I had to know what happened. Great story!
This brought me to tears in the raw honesty and love depicted on the last page, no other erotica has every doen this to me and i thank you dearly for the experience. #1 in the lesbian genre for a reason :'')
Wow, this story left me feeling so wet!!! Where can I find someone to hook up with like this for discreet rendezvous?? Loved it. While making love to my husband, I'll be thinking about these two...
What an amazing & inspiring tale of how beautiful love can truly be! The ladies described were so sensual and passionate and complimented one another very well. Definitely one of the best stories inspired by real life I've had the pleasure of reading.
Amazing.
Loved it, and to think that this actualy happened to someone... it gives me goosebumps
Never felt the need to comment on something here before, but this story is so endearing. It reminds me in an odd way of my first time. Thank you, to all of you, the writer and the two that allowed themselves be written about.
I'm no expert on the exact qualifications of erotica versus romance, stories that have sex in them, etc. However, I get the sense that I can definitely call this story the best erotica I've read during my time on this website. It has mind-blowing sex, yes, but even more than that, it has the longing which I think of every time I hear the word 'erotica'.
You've written a beautiful tribute to your friends' love, and I am amazed at the skillful, sexy delivery of every sentence. I'm jealous of them, and even of your writing talent. This is a wonderful story.
You wrote pure gold here. Thank you for sharing it with me and the rest of us on this website. I cannot thank you enough!
AblatedCrayon
Drawn to this by ablatedcrayon's comment, as I can't resist a promisingly well written story. Loved it, Red Emerald, true talent...Mancelt.
I've been reading on Literotica for nearly six years and this is by far my favorite story; I've reread it several times, in fact. I only wish that I knew what happened next for Jessica and Diane!
Your story is my first. My first visit to this site. You have set a very high standard. The other comments tell me that you are the best. Wow. I am positive I will read this story again. I'm thinking of sharing it with my husband so he can enjoy your work as well. Thank you for the anticipation and the happy ending.....to the story :)
i loved it. absolutely loved it. You painted such beautiful rich vivid pictures with your words. Gorgeous story!
Just love this story of yours. Can't tell you how many times I've read it and know will read it over and over again a million times still. This story just makes me so warm inside and of course the scenes you've described are amazing. I have read your other stories too but this one's my fav.
Wish you would write more soon.
And best wishes to the two ladies in this story if they are still together.
Love.....
This story was truly delicious - well-crafted, engaging voice, beautifully detailed emotion, exquisite sex. A fantastic read.
Now, this is what the true erotic is in a literary term. Sex but no porn! All thumbs up! Fantastic story.
This is the most sensual, tantalising and loving piece I have ever read. It thrilled me to the core and makes me want to seek out a beautiful older woman to pleasure and take control of.
This was a truly feminine story, in tone and content. Thank you, SO much!
Definitely one of the best stories on literotica. It's detailed, while still allowing some imagination on the part of the reader. Thank you for sharing this amazing story!
Beatiful. Insperational. Sensual. This is a truly beatifull story, and so alive,, you write wonderfully, and i am so happy for your friends, i really do hope they live a long and happy life together. Thankyou for this passionate pice.
Makes me long for the lover I wish to have one day.
Although I would hope to be in Diane's shoes.
One of the best reads! I hope that Jessica and Diane live a long and happy life together, wish I could meet them both. Makes me long for the lover I wish to have one day.
Just re-read this after nearly a year and just loved it. The characters are well done, the inner dialog great. Just hope we get more from you (demanding bunch, aren't we!)
I've read this story several times now. I just love it! I hope you continue writing and post some more stories.
This was so good, I am soo happy that this was my first story to read on here. I loved it, thank you for typing it out and everything.
Omg wow simply WOW :) that is by far THE BEST story i have ever read on here or any other site in fact :) absolutely awesome read. Brilliant and i'm glad they're still together. Thanks :) <3 xxx
you are truly gifted. characters, sex content, pacing, everything. please keep it up!
oh my fucking god this drove me crazy! THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU
That was a superb story: incredibly sexy, full of feeling and adventure. Truly a study of a developing relationship that grew and eventually flowered. And, there was no reliance on the usual 'dirty words,' (which Yes, I do enjoy) to titillate; this submission shows that subtlety can rise above and in a sense overcome the urge to turn people on using the quick and easy way, rather than displaying the writer's art. You have talent! When you feel deeply about something of broad scope with characters that require a significant development and have thoughts that you just must get out to the reading public, then give the Great American Novel a first shot. After many attempts and refinements maybe you'll produce it!
I never take the time to write comments for anything, but your story is deserving of one. It was fantastic. I couldn't stop reading. It was enjoyable on so many levels....thanks for great writing and a great story.
This story is extremely intoxicating. The work and writing of it is amazing, simply one of the best erotic stories, in general, I've ever read.
Proof that love can happen when you least expect it.
Beautifally written story, thank you for sharing it.
Wow - I can hardly believe that all that actually happened xD that was wonderful and you definitely succeeded in writing an entertaining, romantic, sexy, and amazing story