All Comments on 'Mom, You're Gorgeous!'

Dialogue could use some work but the story itself went straight to my cock *S*!

This story might seem a bit far-fetched, but it is absolutely believable. Just enough humor to make you chuckle and sexy enough to make you want to join in with the characters. Keep up the good work.

Overall well written -- could use some close proofreading -- like, who is John? There's several minor typos that could be easily cleaned up.

Very well put,

Please continue on with this one

A day to day listing until the kids go back to school would be great.

Keep up the good work

But it needs a few more chapters. We need to have all three in a threesome, and so forth. Also it wouldn't hurt to have the kids bring their lovers home and "be caught" by the other sibling or by Mom or both!! Could make for a good long story!!

Very well done!!

Keep up the good work!

Very believable also. I do know a family that acts this way, by the way. I agree with the previous comment about editting, but all in all a very good story. I really liked the way you had the sister orchestrating it. It was like she had this fantasy all worked out, then tried to bring it to reality. Very nicely done.

I don't think too many would argue that it is the most likely of happenings, but it was really a very fun read.

Great story. Hope there is more coming soon.

I didn't see anything wrong with it like some others did.

I just read it for what it is..

Keep up the good work!!!

This was a great story to read I hope you continue

with more chapters...Keep up the good work

Very hot, maybe more?

I don't see anything wrong with this story!! Dialogue is great if you ask me. I like the tie-in with nudism, too, being a confirmed nudist myself. I agree, more chapters are warranted. Maybe Rhonda's family could be discovered to be into incest as well?

Best of luck with the comp ;-)

it the bes i read. i gave it a 10,9.9,9.9,10.

Very well written. You made it seem believable. Very erotic and nice, with a lot of love and caring not just hard raw mean and selfish sex. More please'

I hope there is more to this story than just one chapter!

Despite careful proofreading - and I did, honest! - in a couple of places I missed changing my character's original name from 'John' to 'Carl'. I was rightly criticised by some of you. This has now been corrected, thanks to Laurel.

Art

doesn't make up for the pathetic dialogue...

Better luck next time hosse

Did I miss something, book_man_03?

Jeff, Barney or Dick, the story rocked!!

Great story...left me wanting more....bring it on!!

Good Story, But it left me wanting more, please make chapter 2 and soon, Still loved it.

Move into the next day. Have multiple engagements with the daughter, then with the son, etc., as they go about the house nude.

Was great...can't wait to read the rest!! Hope you write it soon.

In my world, "wierd" (defined by earth's society) is normality. In fact, for leaders to attain control of individuality - unatural rules are extablished. So I (as a free thinking philosopher) enjoyed your journey into 'pure' human normality.

Ziggy Freud: from the outter world.

Really bad. It all happened way to fast.

Super story line; nice build-up; very hot and sexy. When do we get the sequels? Keep up the good work!

i rated it 50 cause i felt that it was only half of a story which i would like to finish.----and SOON!

I liked the dialog! Sex was hot, too. Caroline, you little mynx!

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loved the story. I definitely want to read more of this luscious trio. It is easy to envision all sorts of family and friends fun.

i just thought you didn't have enough buildup in your story and it all happened so suddenly that it didn't seem real...highly unlikely story. if it had even a medium-level plotline, i would have forgiven you but unfortunately, it didn't. sorry...

This story represents true love between a mother and a son and a brother and a sister. The sex adds to an already good relationship. Well done!

I showed this story to my twin sister. She showed it to our Mom. When I got home tonight there was a message on my machine in my sister's voice inviting me to come for a swim at her home. She called me Carl. That isn't my name.

Thanks for an inspiriring story!

more please!!!

I've read every story on the site and they are really good, and for the ones that don't think so! Tell them to write some that are better. I don't need any feed back! spend the time writing

great

need more

This was an absolutely brilliant read. You have to continue this. :)

You should follow-thru on this - PLEASE !!

Highly enjoyable.Thanks.

I agree that it was a great story. I don't usually read stories that are more than 2 pages long, but this one FORCED me to read on. I must admit that the notes after the story kinda of spoiled the mood. Not sure why you felt it necessary to add the notes. Oh, people do really act like that. Surely you know that not all of those stories are pure fiction. People are doing much more than just writing and reading about incest.

Great story, you've got to carry it on. Maybe introduce the siblings partners in the next chapter.

Your stories are fantatic, great read.

Love them, hope you keep writing

Thanks for sharing

Your stories are fantatic, great read.

Hope you keep writing the family saga!

Mom needs lots more, and Sis is no kitten. More like a lioness. More Please.............LAROC OF AGES

one fab read you make reading so good your one of the best story tellers that doing incest stories the way you got mom caroline , carl together was grat PLS MORE your loving leann xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx mawh

That's a super well written short story.

Tells the story and holds the interest well at the same time.

Very enjoyable! (makes me wish I were Carl) ;)

Yeah, the dailogue frequently dotty and spotty. But the qualities of frolic & lust with mutual regard for all concerned sunblocks out my critical UV rays. Summertime ( it is ) this is to be read & enjoyed !

Mom/son/daughter threesomes are fucking awesome!!

A well written and exciting story. Along with the Crab Island stories are a series I am looking forward to following.

Constantly refer to another woman while having sex.

"Like Rhonda, but different."

"So does Rhonda. If she's excited "

"I love it. It's like Rhonda's, yet it's different."

"I always did like having my tits played with," she murmured."

"So does Rhonda. If she's excited, sometimes I can get her off by sucking her nipples."

And Let's not forget Jimmie.

Although, one mistake you did make. I agree with rightbank. Once mentioned that Caroline and Carl had a boyfriend and girlfriend you need to let them alone. Especially with mom. She was a bit unsure anyway and,"like Rhonda, but different" would not only be a turnoff and possibly kill mom's mood, but its just rude. There, I'm old fashioned. You just don't compare the girl you are with against someone else ever. Especially sexually. And a fellow doesn't 'kiss and tell'. He shouldn't be talking about Rhonda's sex, because it isn't fair to Rhonda. Caroline talking about Jimmy? Well, the same should really apply, but after all - what Caroline said was a compliment to Carl. But otherwise I really like this.

RightBank is sooo right. You never - Ever - mention another woman's name while you are with someone. It just isn't done. Its rude, crude, and socially unacceptable. And a reference to another of your stories. Do you really think a womans pussy tastes like fish? You know, you write good stories. They jump in the deep end a little too fast, but are very entertaining. But you don't treat your characters very well, do you. Once mentioned that Carl had a girl, that should have been the end of her. Caroline really shouldn't have mentioned that Jimmy needs to learn to eat pussy, but she was compareing her brother in a favorable way. Besides, as double standard as it sounds, sometimes women can get away with stuff guys can't. A girl can say something ungraceful to a man in a romantic situation and it probably won't bother him that much, but if a guy says the wrong thing it will likely shut the girl down. The point is, what you have your characters talking about and when really IS important to the story.

Great story. Good development. Would love to see a part 2 and more.

Excellent plot. Amazingly erotic climax taking sister and mother together. Easy to suspend ones disbelief that this could happen. High-quality masturbation material. Thanks!

Really good story, i liked it very much.

He really needs to impregnate both women, it it the ultimate love between them.

DAMN, ONE OF THE BEST STORY I'VE EVER READ HERE. IT WAS SO WELL WRITTEN! YOU SHOULD HAVE WON AN AWARD FOR THIS. IF POSSIBLE I'D GIVEN IT A 10 STAR RATING! THANK YOU.

Very sexy story. Moved well and nicely written. I’ll be looking for more from this author.

They need to give up others and all fall in love. Have babies together...

I don't agree with adding babies to the mix. For starters, it greatly increases the risk of being outed. How do you explain two women, one young and one twice her age, becoming pregnant in the same house when there's only one male in the house? Whose name is listed as the father of each baby? How do they take care of two babies?

Instead of a baby, bring the girlfriend into the act. Maybe a cousin? Maybe a divorcee in the family? A nearby widow?

Just leave the babies out of it.

Very good story. But sounds like mom and sis would both benefit from more exploration. They both seem eager to learn from a good teacher. Even though it has been several years, it would be easy enough to pick up where this left off. So many stories like this end when they are just getting Hot.

One thing about mom/son stories Or brother/sister stories that I find very erotic sometimes is impregnation. But it depends on the story line/plot and characters involved imo. After all, it's just fiction (I think). I don't think I would have liked it for this story because there is both a mom AND sister involved in a single story. But I did enjoy this story and still say it could be continued. 5*

Only an idiot would talk about another woman in the middle of making love to somAeone else. This story is totally in believable!

That was one great story and every man’s fantasy

Wayyy too much talkn' about Rhonda and Jimmy. Especially comparing them.