by scouries
Wow Jim that was great! You’ve done it again giving us interracial love together with hot incestuous coupling and you did it oh so beautifully. Such a clever plot deserves a continuation and I eagerly await a sequel about Joe and his Vietnamese family. Pete.
great sexual and fun stories hard to beat.you the best at writing them.
Jim,
You know you want to write the next chapter. Are you as conflicted as Sam? Or should turn the female equivalent of Joe loose on you? Write the thing!
Loved it. This is the best story I have read today and I've almost read them all. Thanks again.
Jim, your latest writing is truly a masterpiece!!!!It definitely needs to have at least five chapters for completion. The possible plots and sub-plots are endless,and the anticipation soooooo exciting. Please,please continue this wonderful story.
I was there for three years.. I didn't us any protection because I was a dum young kid. I grew up fast and started being like the story. I learned my B&D and S&M roots there and there still with me to this day. I flash back sometime late at night when I set and looking up at the stars. Thinking back when I see some stars remembering the lovely and young and fun time with the mom-sone and daughters. I would like to know if there still there but I don't think I will every find out..
Write the story... Tho it's not TRUE It's still enjoying reading.
I would like to use my Biker and Master name but with the way this world is going to many people know to much and try and us things agains us. SO I will sign Anonymous
I don't know which is worse, this pile of bigotted garbage masquarading as a story or the readers who thought this was a wonderful story.
the Ct. Yankee
I quote - I turned slowly to face the offending noise, and was blinded for a second by the sun shining over her shoulder, but then simply panicked when I recognized the silhouette. – offending noise? I thought it was a voice? ‘but then simply panicked’. Um. Wouldn’t it be ‘and panicked’? Why simply? Really, you seem to have a very fertile imagination – maybe you can learn how to put it on paper.
I enjoyed the story! I found it very hot,very sexy and by the time I finished reading it I realized my panty was wet!I am looking forward to reading the next installment!
This was most intriguing.
I really like your abrupt style and your non apologetic approach to this.
Thank you for a great story. Please, do write more.
-Pultoy
Nice build up to the next Chapter. Waiting for you to finish the next installment. Excelent start to a good storyline, contrary to what others would have you believe.
Thank you.
Very good outline and twist. I cant wait to read the second chapter!!!
story. I am surprised only one anti-Vietnam peacenik crawled out from under a rock to complain.
Families have close relatives on both sides were common, which "hurt" our efforts to do background searches on workers to give security clearances.
too many things too real.
Unfortunately, too many anti-Asian rumors exist about the Vietnam war, and this story runs them up big time. However, there are also too many truths about how couples were broken up, especially at the end of the war. To read about the chaos that the end created, read White Christmas in April by my father Toby Haynsworth.
OK, is this story good? Hell Yeah! The idea of fucking your granddaughter unknowingly is far fetched, but it is well done.
dude you have to write some more of this one damn i could not stop reding it i will give you a hundred on this one
dude you have to write some more of this one damn i could not stop reding it i will give you a hundred on this one
Over the top - what a strange story. I usually don't read let alone like incest stories, but somehow this one works.
an excellent storie continue it so they all get together in the end
Well written, with a great storyline. Do continue with part 2!
Please comtinue with this story... it was well written and got the juices flowing
Your writing has improved significantly I am pleased to note and say.
Your characters are varied and remain consistent throughout the story.
I only noted one grammmatical error, not uncommon here -- the use of plural instead of possessive, e.g., "famalies" instead of "family's".
I look forward to your continuing sequels to this tale.
continue the story of the vietnamese grandaughters to include the grand mothers coming stateside to see you!
The thing about love that makes it so special is that even when a guy acts like a jerk, a woman can love him. As a veteran of Viet Nam, I loved this story. It rang true, just as Joe rang Sam's bell.
Nookiehunter
Can't wait for more. This story has so many neat ways to go.
PLEASE give your readers a "forever after" or "Or oh SH**!"
I am fairly new to the site an rreeaalllly enjoy
your work..
Thanking you in advance..Rick (nor cal usa)
Raw crude and fantastic I loved it.
Had me so hard I could have squashed a flea with my cock.
Can't wait till you split her sister.
This story was awesome, never mind the length. I can't wait to read the next one!!!!
Dude, that was awesome. I cant wait for the next installment.
a near 60 year old guy cums 5 times with Sam in less than 24 hrs? Even with Viagra, you're still smoking dope if you believe that. While your writing is very good, another error is the guy's mental state. At 60, his thoughts and actions are described in the same way as when he was 18. Rough, tough, and crude have to mellow at least a little over the years. He is so preoccupied with sex (young sex)that in today's world, he would be on several states' sex offender list. As a follow-on thought, instead of being politically correct with all participants being 18 or over, tell the truth about how it was in-country. You stated, "The girl coulda been anywhere from eighteen to thirty-six. I didn't have a clue." The truth would have been she could have been anywhere from fifteen to twenty-five. I will agree that it was usually impossible to tell in the oriental culture. In the coming chapters/stories, please don't screw every woman that shows up. His reunion with Han and Kim and the kids should not end up in an orgy; give him a little dignity for once.
don't kill the story as soon as I read the title and trailer on the author's page. Would have been a killer story if I had discovered their relationship in the third page/chapter.
First, Please continue this lovely story. Next, what a hot, sexy, and beautiful storyline. This is my favorite story of yours so far. Tremendous work on recalling Vietnam and piecing together the stories you heard growing up with your own material. I felt as if I could really see the picture of the pool when Sam saw it. The sex scenes were ultra steamy. Certainly some of the best I have read of yours. It reads like you really enjoyed writing it too. Thank you.
Thought it was really great. We need another chapter - preferably now.
Sounds a lot like me when I was in Thailand. Would still love to reconnect with her.
Something about this story was incredibly hot. Probably my fav so far! I hope you'll continue! :)
please continue this storyline. there are so many possibilities.
sweet and hot.. but the jingoistic racism was a bit annoying. I know I know.. essential for the plot and he certainly came around a bit... I definitely would love to see a chapter 2 with a reunion with Kim and of course Cyn's deflowering...
While slightly younger than your character, I didn't go incountry until '69, it revived memories. Thank you
where is part 2 by now you should of had more than 2 pages of ideas. Thanks Mike from Texas.
...Wow....been a feist the last few days reading all these stories you have written,.. Scouries this one is a gem,..i sure hope you continue this story..on and on and on and on...thank you so much for the entertainment,...much, much better than going to the movies...
Nice job, the characterization and description was good. Like Hongluobo, the jingo racism and hi-tech peeping almost turned me off - I'm glad I continued, because there's some deep thought in this one - I can see this guy, recoiling from what he wants, but can't have, and going the other way completely.
Wa-a-ay better story than you usually see in a porn site, almost an x-rated version of, say, "Gran Torino" or "Miss Saigon" - not that they're in any way derivative of those stories, but you've explored the same kind of themes here.
Very,very nice work. Just a suggestion - if you cleaned this up, took out the incest, and say made it into a story where this PTSD-burned high tech peeping Tom, say, simply discovers that Samantha is his grand daughter, maybe snaps back something in Vietnamese, starts dealing with his PTSD and re-unites with his Asian family (grin-maybe make it one Viet girl) I think this would be a saleable story. Something like an alternative ending to "Miss Saigon", or, for that matter, the "Lt Dan" subplot in "South Pacific"
I am not puffing smoke, dude, there's the roots of a good mainstream story here.
wish I'd thought of it. Jeeze, I can see a really good, marketable story here. If you need a co-author, I'd be glad to help,man.
I wasn't too sure at the beginning because of the ethnic slurs, but I understood the context. Now one of my favourites. Your writing is exemplary.
I was in a completely different aspect of the war.....Navy gunship going up rivers to support ground troops and Green Beret outposts(1965-66). But I have sweet memories of the young Vietnamese pussy I enjoyed on our rare Liberty opportunities.
I love your story and have no criticism, but being the consumate pussy licker, would love a more detailed description of you sucking these sweet pussies to many orgasms.
Great Work!!
Jim, I must have read this story 5 times!! I have always loved it. It has its very touching moments, and also its sexy moments. While I missed being drafted by a year, I have lived in Asia now for 27 years, but have never been to Vietnam as my focus has always been on China. A most beautiful story... and while it has been 2 years and you have moved on to many other excellent stories, I for one would love to see you dust it off and write Chapt. 2 and 3 or whatever you can manage. Thank you
Jim, Thanks again for another fine piece. You masterfully allow your readers to get right into the story.
Would love to read a Part 2, there really is much more material here.
Mate, it would be great if you completed the next part of this story. I think "Jasmin" liked it even more than I did. It's the forbidden part that makes her so horny after reading it. Thanks for the good writing with few, if any, errors. A pleasure to read. Please continue.
Great story. Hope to maybe read a dirty uncle type story from you. ;)
Read this a long time ago and after re-reading it again, still waiting for a sequel. Great story, but only half done at best.
im about to reread this badass piece of fiction i want a sequel if you can muster it but i understand if you for whatever reason cant but if it was left up to me you would be writing 2 additional chapters 10 pages each lol lots of time with the grannies and with the grand daughters ... hell yeah haha both intimate and not i enjoyed the hell out of this story the first time i read it was severly disappointed when i didnt find a sequel when i finished , yeah only thing that i dont like about your writing is there isnt enough of it haha
When you do the sequel (PLEEEZE) I'm afraid that you'll find that another is required. This storyline could tie up an awful lot of time so I'd understand if you never get the second part written. I'll be disappointed, but I'll understand. Thanx for the effort.
I absolutly loved this, I'm surpriesed a part 2 is not up already. This story was fantastic and a cliffhanger too. As you have seen with the other comments we all want to read more about what will happen with Sam Cyn and there family. Hope to read some more of this soon =]
you took me back on a journey I traveled long ago.... Beautiful, well done brother.... keep the faith and write sequels.... I am actually back in Nam working now and enjoying...
Mr. Scouries, it has been quite some time and no part 2. this is a great story and needs proper attention. lol, you should not be such a great writer. Do you have any ideas of when this story will have a long and wonderful followup? thanks larry
YOU KNOW YOU HAVE TO PLACE A BOW ON THIS HOWEVER MAKE SURE HE TAGS UP THE REST OF THE CLAN AND ALLOW HIS SO TO TAG HIS BLOND HAIR DAUGHTER AND COEDS... NOW GET TO WRITING MY IMAGINATION IS WAITING
I see that the orignal was written back in 2007, its 2012 don't you think time to submit the secondhalf. I rated this story 5 stars, wonderful to the 10th power
MY goodness....you really need a part 2.....the dreams I have of a followup...PLEASE!!!!!PLEASE!!!!!
Greate story. Inquiring minds wants to know what happened next.
great story line. good flow and decent sex. i prefer shorter asian women, but they'll do. time to write chapter 2. thank you.
A very emotional and gripping story. I love the transition of the main character from an old ugly perverted racist to a sad man who was deprived of the family he truly wanted, and finally regaining some of that through his granddaughter. I love stories that leave the reading guessing for him/herself what will happen next but like the other people before me, I wouldn't mind a sequel (especially the reunion with Han and Kim). I feel Asian stories (good ones at least) are hard to come by here, and I was glad I accidentally stumbled into this one :-)
I"m intrgued to find out what happens when Joe meets Han and Kim again. Please write more.
Surprised at how good that felt, can (almost) feel her body against mine. Very glad that he maintains the fitness of his cock. It helps Love to conquer Fear.
But where would the story be without your imagination.
This is great. It's got some nicely thought out background, and some very hit sex. I'd love to read another chapter or three about Joe and his granddaughters.
It was a wonderful story and I would love for you to continue with it. I know it's been a long time since you posted the story. I hope you will write some more or at least tie up the loose ends.
I'm a Viet Nam vet and I loved this story. I NEED the next chapter NOW! PLEASE!
I enjoyed this tale and would like to read more. Pleased to see you use CUNT for the female genitals -- most of your compatriiots seem to avoid this word, using the childish PUSSY instead! Keep on writing, your output's always good Cheers, John.
Loved your story, can't wait to read what should follow...
Anyway, thank you for writing a good story.
Also a Nam vet though Tonkin Gulf Yacht Club. One of the guys who worked for me found out he had a 13 year old daughter working a bar in the Philippines. This is a tale of lust, and love. There's nothing wrong with that.
Your stories are about people. Real people like the ones I know. You give me a very high standard to shoot for in my own writing.
Thanks
hope you get to write chapter 2 sometime soon . see you later. bob w.
I would like to read the next chapter.
Love your stories. I just hope you forgot to post the chapter since it was so long ago.
If not please consider doing it. Thanks anyway :)
Believable enough for me :). ...well except the part about all the girls he slept with over there being over eighteen, lol. Gotta meet the boards requirements though, lol.
I would LOVE to see a part two of this!! Its been a long time since Ive read this and havent seen it pop up so I hope you still have the rough draft handy! :)
...few enough asian stories on here. I dont know where I picked up my asian love and fetish, hell, Im still trying to figure out how in the hell I married a wide hipped pale white girl, lol.
First, let me bow to your greatness Sir. I can honestly say YOU are the great American hero; or at least mine! I couldn't help but hang on every word. I like how you gave some background info as that part of the story started to develop. It brings clarity to the bigger picture in my head & helps with character development & whatnot. I swear, this has got to be one of the best, if not the best, story I've ever read or heard of. If I was you, I'd go buy a fuckin lottery ticket cuz you're so goddamn lucky...goddamn rat-bastard, I'm jealous!
You can't leave me hanging like this, to hell with everyone else, if even only for me, you gotta finish it & damn, I hope it finishes the way I'm hoping...you, 8 titties & 4 dripping wet pussies begging for that angry inch!!
A tip of the hat to you Sir, for you are a God amongst mere mortals!
P.s: I live in Southern California, probably right by your ladies (if they're by little Saigon = garden grove/westminister)
I read that story the second time.
don't remember the time when i discovered it first.
rated it like 5 (this time)
best ever!
you're a great author so i would like to complimet you more, but, as you have alredy guessed, I'm not english or american tongue, so i just copied the comment of someone annonymous that i want to add to my words
thanks annonymous and take my appology for copying without asking you first but i couldnot have formulated that any better:
A God amongst mere mortals....
First, let me bow to your greatness Sir. I can honestly say YOU are the great American hero; or at least mine! I couldn't help but hang on every word. I like how you gave some background info as that part of the story started to develop. It brings clarity to the bigger picture in my head & helps with character development & whatnot. I swear, this has got to be one of the best, if not the best, story I've ever read or heard of. If I was you, I'd go buy a fuckin lottery ticket cuz you're so goddamn lucky...goddamn rat-bastard, I'm jealous!
You can't leave me hanging like this, to hell with everyone else, if even only for me, you gotta finish it & damn, I hope it finishes the way I'm hoping...you, 8 titties & 4 dripping wet pussies begging for that angry inch!!
A tip of the hat to you Sir, for you are a God amongst mere mortals!
Aside from the incredible odds against an American soldier with two lost Vietnamese wives meeting and fucking one of his granddaughters in America, 40 years later, it's also improbable that: 1) the soldier would become a ranting anti-Vietnamese racist; 2) he would spy on all of his tenants for years with high-tech equipment and never be discovered by anyone; and 3) his Vietnamese-American granddaughter would want him to fuck her beloved sister as well as herself, and would not feel obliged to tell her sister who this man really was in their family's history before even introducing them to each other.
Nevertheless, you are quite a storyteller, and your skills enable us to overlook the improbabilities and enjoy "My Vietnamese Granddaughter" anyway. Thank you.
I have rated this story 5 stars; after I started I could not put it down. Very intrigued with the ins and outs of the relationships.
When can we have a part 2? The story needs a proper conclusion and the meeting of the protagonists. Plus, the drawing together of his US family.
Great Story Loved It
Chase
Excellent story kind of leaves you hanging though definitely needs a part 2
loved it I was in Vietnam 67- 68 I have loved Vietnamese women ever since just couldn't
find 1 to marry when I returned to the states.
Yes, I want to see more about the sisters and their grandfather...
OMG I loved this story! I need more. Please write a sequel to this. How far you take it is up to your writer's mind. My suggestion at least reconnect with Kim and Han and possibly the children and the other grandchild. Cant wait to read it!!!!