by Romantic1
A fine combination of love and intrigue. You remind me of a couple other fine authors who I will email you about. Keep up the good work!!!
I'm hooked on the characters, disregarding the likelihood that the relationship would develop that fast. Looking forward to future installments. Regards.
It is a good story. Just leave out words like cunt and tits. It does not fit in with the style of diction you are using. You have chosen a strong narrator and the voice you are using is wonderful. Keep up the good work.