by TomNJus
You had me on a real rollercoaster with this chapter, well done. this has been a fantastic read and i am sad it has come to its conclusion. I shed tears of joy and sadness.
I hope we will see something new from you soon please thank you for sharing
Such a great story, marred by a ping pong POV. You need to choose a POV and stick to it. Every time you switched POV it stopped the action and emotion of the story, distracting the reader. You have such a strong lyrical voice. Your characters are real, so please don't take long for your next story. I'm looking forward to it!
that's the happiest freakin' ending ever. and i loved it. but i'm sad the story's over. when can we expect the next one from one or all of you??
I can't thank you guys enough. Such wonderful characters and love, and this is from a straight female. I've laughed and cried with Joel and Devlin, and now that it's over, I'm crying again!!I just can't get enough of the 2 guys.
I've slept and woke up thinking about them and their love for each other,wishing they were real, wishing I'd someday find such love too.
This story is truly the best I've ever read here.
Thank you again.
haha, i dont even know wat to say. everyone else has already said it. i loved it. i was so glad when you guys didnt draw out healing process because u honetly dont think i would have been able to stand it. and the lesbian comment was hilarious. im glad these two made it. i would have died if they didnt.
Jessie
You both have accomplished writing a story that tugs at the heart as well as heats up the hormones. The mixture of story and exquisite steamy sex is rare to read. Congrats on the final chapter. Let me know when the spin-offs are submitted *wink*
What a wonderful ending to a wonderful story. You MUST write more stories! And please do keep the “ping pong POV” in future stories. You do it elegantly and I love how it allows me to get equally involved in both characters by knowing them both. I really really hope you will grace us with more stories. I know I will be looking in on your profile from time to time – partly to reread this story and partly to see if you have posted new stuff. Thanks again for this wonderful story, that kept me up far too late – I hope I can stay awake at work tomorrow ;P
What you did with my little suggestion was far more than I had ever thought of-- simply fabulous!
whew, that was a hot finish!
with Devlin and Joel that i hated to see the story end! how absolutely beautiful this chapter was. thank you!
i love this series. so sad it's over, like everyone else who commented. i do have to admit though, the changing perspectives of the story did distract me a bit.
plz? pretty plz?
Delvin & Joel's story was wickedly hot & we all loved it to death...So more!! You've turned us into monster's for ur writing so its time to feed the beast! lol
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this is one of the best stories i've read so far; i would love to read more about joel and devlin ;they are wonderful.
christ on a cracker, i LOVED it!!!!! ;o)
so very well written, that's one of the best stories i've read on here till now!
please, you have to keep writing!!
I laughed, I cried, I masturbated...please keep writing!!! LOL
I have to say. I'm pretty much in love with this story. I liked how you gave both points of view because it made it easy to think of both Devlin and Joel as being the main characters and not one being more important than the other. I love how your view of a character (or a person) changes the more you learn about them. Both Devlin and Joel 'looked' completely different to me at the end of the story than they did at the beginning, and I liked the change. I loved the combination of sexy-hot love scenes and the show of feelings from both of them. I think that, (as opposed to all sex and nothing else) makes the best erotic stories. But that's just my opinion. I would definitely be interested in hearing more about these two guys!
Oh my gosh that was the best sex story i ever read. Not only did it have hot scenes i masterbauted to but it had a well developed plot and a ton of intense emotion which I LOVED! Very awesome. Please write us another!
the heart wants to sing just like patsy so full of the beauty it feels. sometimes a story sings too.
I loved how the story was perfect and the characters were not. How refreshing!
An amazing story. So well written and realised, emotionally engaging, just totally wicked on so many levels. For a genre that I would normally never browse, I'm so glad I took a chance on reading it - also proving that well-deserving authors get the top spot. I felt the same after reading jfinns 'the human condition'. Beautiful story, thanks for sharing it with us.
what a beautiful touching story. is so great to read true erotica, meaning it is soooo not porn. E,otional depth is great and feels near true. As a bi guy trying to come to grips with what being bi means, this story tugged at me...i read the whole thing in one sitting. great job! A Million Thank Yous!
Urgh, so good that it hurts when I realized it's over.
Btw, for some reason, I keep thinking of Gerald Butler as Gabe when you managed the accent, which was such a turn on
What great writing, I'm very impressed. Thanks for the wonderful read. The characters are real and endearing. I had to read it all at once and stayed up late at night to finish it!
This was such a real story, and it was so easy to fall in love with Joel and Devlin. Thank you for bringing us this amazing story!! Kisses
I have to say that tom Collins,Jushorny and 3113 are awesome writers. this is one of my favourite story on Literotica and I have read it soooo many times. I am sorry that it ended and that I havent seen much more from u all.Thanks for sharing this master piece with us.
...thank you so much for sharing Devlin's and Joel's story. It is -without a doubt- the best I've ever read on here. I loved the changing POV! It gave us an insight into both minds and, considering how complex the two are, I think this was the right way to do them both justice. I can feel Dev and Joel being real and I hope that, one day, I'll also find someone who loves me in such a complete and giving way. I'm really sad the story is over and more so that you haven't submitted anything else- but I won't give up looking. Thanks once again. It was truly perfect.
I read from chapter one and just couldnt stop. Fantastic story with some great sex scenes. Im going to have to read the series over again. Thank you so much for sharing this story!
So good, I forgot to stop to review along the way. The characters felt real, the crisis and resolution was just right, and the sex was very hot.
I was so enthralled that I forgot to comment along the way. This is by far one of the best stories i have read on this site. You guys need to keep writing. Your characters feel real and your knowledge of Irish traditions and Gaelic made this story so life like. Oh and the sex was hot!
You guys cannot seriously quit writing as a team...you're just too good.
Please collaborate again and post it here.
You're the BEST!!
I look forward to more of your writing. I so want that life for myself (of course without the momentary angst). You're my first Favorite.
This is one of the best series I have read. It is true what they say when you are good, YOU ARE GOOD! Actually you are brilliant. Thank you.
Seriously. That was... Awesome... Damn, I actually can't think of a single thing to say that hasn't already been said. I loved the characters; they felt real and I could actually imagine them. The emotions were just right; I found myself feeling a lot of their emotions with them, which is great. The story line was believable, unlike a lot of the stories I've read on here, which makes me immensely happy. And the love scenes were so hot and steamy, I got a little (okay, a lot) excited. But this last one -where they claim their love- was so sweet and emotion-packed that I actually felt as if I was spying on something so personal, it should have been private. This is definitely one of my favorites. You guys collaborate well together.
All in all, though, I really, really loved this series. I'd love it if you'd post the second one on here. You've made my day with this one. (Okay, so it took me several days to read all the chapters, but it still made my day. Especially with the happy ending.)
--Soulless
You guys have created a great story that I couldn't stop reading...All in one sitting... Thank you!
I've read this series several times and it always makes me smile. The author is in need of a proofreader, but the story itself is tender and hot, sweet and very sexy. Well done! Please write more. : )
I've read this story a couple of times and love it. If you like this one, you should buy and read their next book, "When Irish Eyes are Sparkling." I just finished it (it's about Joel's nephew, Liam). Joel and Dev make a cameo appearance, as well. It's really good, too.
The timing was spot on-loved the balance of story line and raw sex! Would love to hear more of their story and/or future writings by this author.
I live in Grand Haven, Michigan. I want to be dressed up and to suck and fuck a big cock. Leave a comment to set up a time and place.
i'm looking for a story about this guys who finds himself in a quaint resort owned by the "straight guy" who he kissed in college. i dont know the author and the title but i know i want to find it again and finish reading it!please help me! you can contact me at gonzalescompound@yahoo.com
One of the best stories I have read in a long, long time. Thank you so very much for sharing this with us.
The story you were looking for is I Know What I'm Doing by AzanianHeat, my personal most favourite :) . I recommend it to any reader out there.
This is such a beautiful story and i loved every word of it,i am so happy that Joel and Devilin found each other, i wish there was more chapters, I did not want it to end. You are a really Great Writer and i can't wait to read more of your work
This story is one of the best I've ever read! I love your work! Keep it up!
Well done. My eyes won't stop leaking and you couldn't chisel the grin off of my face.
story i've read in a long time...i've read it multiple times, n i think that u weaved a beautiful tale that tugs at heartstrings without getting too complex n still manages to be so real....great work...its sad that u haven't written more on this site...would hav been great if u had..
multiple times over and I'm sad that it's over. It was quite good and I love Dev and Joel.
5 star's across the board on all chpt's 1-6. amazing writer, keep it up. Hope you do more.
and the first few hours of the morning. Immediately made it a fav story and you my fav author. And now I gotta stop typing to wipe the tears.
Thank you TomNJus...for a miraculous read.
i rarely read stories or re-read them like i did with ur story..its really good
Don't know why it took me so long to finally read this story but it was amazing, beautiful and hott!!
So good!!
Will be re-reading it much in the future.
Hope we see more stories from you Tom.
:)
That was seriously one of the best stories. I wish it could go on forever.
So many wonderful parts, love the shifting POV and clear distinct voice of each main character. Would love to have them in my life for real, maybe as next door neighbours. Fantastic to see that a sequel can be bought. I am heading over there now to get it ASAP.
This story just goes to show how little, stupid mistakes can so easily submarine a relationship. Thankfully Joel and Dev took the time to own up to what they did, come to an understanding and work it out to both their advantages.
i really wish you would write more about them. Like maybe about if they get kids or maybe more on Gabe.
5 stars is not enough to rate it but i did anyway lol ,I loved every second of it the comedy,sweetness,pain,the vulnerability of both dev and joel.the pov's were just right i loved how it was fast paced full of action they went out they did things it was not always sex and giggles they worked,they had the usual hassles we all have at work they had what we wish for during a long day at work withh no end in sight someone on a "mission of mercy"lol Dev.The story was like a romance that happened to someone i know and i was just reading all about it from a reliable source the characters were fresh to me and well written their individual personalities were well done.it was fantastic i applaud you well done love.nixie
oh i forgot to say i love the irish and their luck so "erin go bragh!! and of course" go maire sibh! to you all job well done .nixie
Flowergurl17 look for When Irish eyes are sparkling by Thirteen and Tom Collins who collaborated to make this wonderful series. The publishing links are on their bio.
I loved it from start to finish and now at 2am in the morning I will sleep. Brilliantly written and such heart and soul in these two characters beautiful
This is the best story on literotica thank you for sharing this.
This story was excellent. The characters were wonderfully drawn and very engaging. Thanks for sharing this story with us.
The story could indeed be wonderful, Tom definitely has a talent. An almost perfect combination of explicit sexual scenes and slowly unfolding world of growing feelings.
Plus intimate thoughts and great jokes and dialogues.
However I have my reservation about the last chapters - it IS pity that you did not finish the story with the co-author you were with in the beginning. Your later co-authors and editors were all females and it is felt very strongly. I am afraid their influence has utterly ruined what could be a real treasure of men's erotica.
The later chapters of this story feel al lot like another female author's attempt to describe a psychological world of a Man - this kind of "creativity" you can see in the Jean Awell’s ridiculous series about Ayla ("Clan of the Cave Bear" and all its sequels).
The Devlin character which used to be so captivatingly erotic and manly and whose emotional evolution was so natural in the first parts got turned into wimping bottom-boy full of stupidest regrets and utterly un-grounded self-accusations. Finally he ended in a position of a sub totally deprived of any man’s trait. Un-interesting and dull.
The Joel character, which was so charming and really worthy losing one's heart for in the beginning ended up with a scent of a possessive housewife.
It all feels like female fantasies about effeminizing a man and getting power to the hands of a ‘natural sissy’.
I understand this has already been done to the heterosexual society in the satanized western world where a strong White Christian man is the most oppressed member of society now. But lately they seem to have started to ruin manly images even within the homosexual part of society.
That’s bad, Tom, and because of this I will surely re-read the first chapters of your great story but will never re-read the later ones that you have written with the ‘aid’ of that female circle.
(Note: a ‘macho’ does not necessarily mean a ‘dumb-ass’ and if the authors have only had an experience with strong men that are also stupid or totally insensate than let me express my condolences.
Note #2: I myself am a 'sissy' bottom boy, so it's just an outsife perspective.)
My sweetest kisses to ya all )
This story kept me enthralled from beginning to end! I wish there were more stories series from the authors!
Epilogue please!!! One of the best stories ever. Do they have kids? Another mix up? Threesome? Lol
Wholly COW!!! Amazing story by some talented writers! THANK YOU!
Loved the whole thing from beginning to end...would love to know what happens next! Would ggive more stars, but it wont let me alter what I put in by mistake grrr!
That was so FANTASTIC!! I squealed at the end, and I'm not a squealer. Great story
Oh how beautiful!! I should be doing my assignment right now but i had to finish this. It hooked me and reeled me in. Fantastic job.
I am going to admit that I read all of these in one night. I will also state that I did tear up...*sniffle* very well written. So many emotions. I feel exhausted but in a good way. Loved it. Added to my rotation of reading.
TM
This has been to date the best story on here i have ever read. The personal and emotional development of the characters from beginning to end is outstanding. You have created two characters that readers can very easily relate to and sent both them and us on a rollercoaster ride of emotions and laughter. I absolutely loved it. Please continue to write such amazing art
Don't forget to write, again. Looking forward anxiously to your next story.
Must be my eight time reading it. I feel happy, and hopeful by its end. I trust you will write another story. One caveat, I know this is literotica but seeing as how your story was more loving than lustful perhaps next time you can not go into questionably tasteful details of the protagonists sex life.
I saw that there was a sequel with Liam that you had published with great reviews-but it's no longer being published/can't be purchased? Could you publish it here or know where it can still be purchased?
Where have you been all these years? Please write again.
Just found this story, and it is so good I couldn't put it down until finished. Will put it aside for another read later.
Even better after the second read........you are a great story writer
How the hell did I miss this story all these years?! Absolutely amazing!!!!
A really well written love story.
The narrative is so good that this reader was completely immersed in the action.
Dialogue is spot on and the way the story involves the reader makes for a thoroughly satisfying reading experience.
Five Stars every day of the week and a tragedy that this is the only posting from these authors.
One of my absolute favourite stories. I’ve come back several times to read it again. The final page still brings tears to my eyes. Thank you for imagining such a wonderful pair of men and their growing relationship.