by Contrasting
I just completed this marathon from chapter1 - only a week or two after doing the same with the entire milf list! This story in some ways is tighter than the milf list series which occasionally goes off at tangents - but perhaps that is one of its attractions.
Anyway, back to AFI. Gale/Livingstone is an interesting 'hero,' vindictive, manipulative, a serial blackmailer and rapist whose prime motivation is power to use women as he will. (You could have put all this series in Non Consent) His only redeeming feature is that he is not violent to the women. Even the noxious Crowley was shown in the last chapter to have some boundaries he is not willing to cross. None the less Gale is convincing in a very well told 'almost epic.'
Some themes, collars, subjection of the women, the vast casts, are common to both of your epics. The major difference with AFI is the lack of humour evident in the Milf series (particularly between Sonny and his friends. Gale lacks that and in some ways it makes him a more sinister and believable character.
It will be interesting to see where you take the storyline, 20 women is a hell of a lot to get through without being repetitive - even remembering who's who is an issue!
It might be tempting to seemingly soften Gale's character a little - maybe to get the women onside, but fundamentally your hero is definitely an anti hero so don't stray too far from that. At some point the sister is going to have to pay her dues, perhaps she will seek to take control of the family money. Gale will see through it, but will fuck her anyway - because that's him.
Well written story definitely worth following.
Love your work! This is a fantastic series! I can't wait to read each new installment
You did good my friend .... I thought he was older .... More like 36 .... But what the heck. Young boy to me is 29 .... I'm 67 So there you go people love your stories.
A 2 week marathon read, all of the stories. Loved them. I'm bout empty. Lol.
A good series with a little bit over something for everyone. How many chapters are you planning this story to continue through?
True... Unable to resist reading the next page while I got ready for work. Watching time slipping away... DUH.. Barely made it to work on time... Thanks a lot! No, Really, thanks!
I know it's your fantasy... Thanks for sharing! Gonna need more.... I'm waiting...
Man what a great series, I have so many thoughts on how you could go forward,. but it's yours and you've done a superb job. I cannot wait for your next chapter
Really good story,
brilliantly mixed story & sex, just awesome.
waiting for your update
Two comments; more anal by all participants and, if you can clean cum from a cunt, you can clean cum from an asshole. Make the sex more erotic.
I don't like long stories as they usually run out of ideas and get boring quite quickly.
You are the first contributer to keep me guessing whats going to happen next.
Keep up the good work and try and get back to writing some new chapters asap.
This has been an excellent series, please continue it. Have you dropped or lost interest in this series? You have added several other submissions since this last chapter. Hopefully you'll bring it to conclusion.