by BrettJ
I didn't understand your use of ya'll, which refers to more than one person. It made it confusing.
As a southern girl myself, I understood the use of the word y'all perfectly. Although I don't talk like that, I do know quite a few people who do. Anyway, nice story. I hope there is more to come.
True southerners know that "y'all" is a singular pronoun. Its plural is "all y'all."
story is very good just hope you can keep the rest is as good it flowes realy well lets see if the sequel is as hot yours leann hugs & kiisses