All Comments on 'Christmas Dreams'

This could be a better story with a lot of editing and something more romantic than a violent dream. The story lacks depth and development. It needs a lot of work.

Could have been improved with more of a hint of the rage as her fantasy was temporarily torn away. Followed by forgiveness when his passive acceptance to her ministrations (induced by kinetic energy poisoning) won her back.

Sounds like a romance Roald Dahl would write, one with a real sting in the tail.

judging by the other comments, it seems that you've annoyed those in search of one more bit of seasonal saccharine, but I thought this was quite well crafted - a nice segue from cloying romance to insanity, along that well-traveled road. 5 stars

Why is this under Romance. It should be horror...

It's not a conventional Romance story, but it definitely is worth a vote of 5. :)

Sick fuck be gone

Reminds me of Faulkner.

Its coherent and cohesive, and entertaining.

The hook is its easy seduction.

The cumulative score oughta be 4.5 or better. I don't care for auxiliary verbs, and this has plenty, but I didn't mark down for it.

All things considered its 5 star stuff.