by Carnal_Flower
Love everything you write. You never disappoint. I will keep reading your stories as long as you want to keep writing them. Job well done
Great build-up and it would be a terrific series of hot sex and maybe bring the girl from the convenience store in at some point and make the girl their play toy?
Keep up the great writing !!!
Have to read the rest later, but this is a really good story. Liked the part about the redhead -- piercings and tattoos -- guess I'm old school as I like inkless skin :)
Can't wait to read the rest -- this is great!
Carnal, another hot sexy read. As always so erotic and exciting as Daddy takes care of these little minx ... lol
Your writing is always so realistic! And always so hot! Wonderful seduction of Daddy by his twin girls written so erotic and you never fail to arouse your readers. Fabulous job!
Expertly crafted story! You have an amazing writing style. I've been writing erotic stories for a long time but it would seem I have a long way to go to even come close to your skills. I will have to use you as an inspiration for my future works. Keep up the good work!
Outside of some confusion by you with regards to the twins (heh..but who doesn't get confused by twins?) I thought this was a fantastic read. Thanks so much for sharing and Merry Christmas!
Excellent! Anyone who nitpiks the little slips should be ignored. This was awesome. Amazed Bruce could stroke himself for so long ... I'da cum in my hand long before that ... glad he waited and dumped his cum in Lisa!
Great job here. I loved how you stretched out the stories climax. WELL DONE!
Yes, we all saw that tiny, inconsequential error. The rest of us recognized a fine story while you were picking nits out of your nose hair.
For the author: really fine work with the right amount of tension build-up, erotically appropriate dialogue, and wet endings for all.
God damn what a perfect story! So there may have been a mistake or two who gives a damn? This story was amazing, keep up the fine work.
Yes, there were several little self-editing misses that you can fix later. More importantly, truly fun and sexy story! You made the personalities distinct between the twins, and their alts, which is not easy. The story flowed, you built tension toward the climax, the fire and snow added romance and atmosphere to characters I wanted to see get together, and when they did it was hot, all of which equals an easy five star.
With some minor corrections, this could be a true stand out. Good luck with the contest!
Fantastic! Very good story. Hot and sexy and also cute and romantic. Not to mention funny! "You mean Cupcake!" lol. I hope we see these naughty girls again!
So hot and fun! What incredible girls. Can't wait for the sequel!
Poor daddy had no chance with these two little minxes.
Do they do Christmas in July? That's a tradition, down these ways...
That was quite good. I hope that there will be sequel in which girl from store would join them.
I want Cupcake and Kandi to teach him how to spank them properly and fill their bums.
I don't have twins but I do have a gorgeous 19 daughter and she saved her virginity for me. I know all through high school every guy around wanted to fuck her but she wouldn't have it. When she was 17 she wanted to fuck me but I told her I could go to prison so every time her mom was gone even if only for 30 minutes or so she would pull her pants down and play with her pussy while I jacked off. The day she turned 18 she told her mother she wanted me to take her virginity her mom completely freaked out telling her to leave the house. Well I got up took her to a hotel and had my way with her all night taking her virgin pussy we 69 each other until we both came in each other mouth several times the best night of my life and in the morning after licking and sucking and sticking my tongue in her ass just plain eating it for at least an hour she begged me to fuck her ass and I did as hard as I could until I filled her with cum. I left her mom and we now live alone. I'm 47 and I get to fuck her anyway I want as much as I want she can't get enough cum. I love my girl
So unbelievably hot, I was hooked from the beginning. Please continue this story it is in the top five that I've ever read.
That was absolutely smoking hot and delicious!! ....It was so good that even the blatantly misplaced g-spot scene while he banged her over the chair didn't even phase my elation, hehehe.