by writerannabelle
I've been following this entire world for a good while now, and I marvel at the ideas that jump out of your mind onto the page! Splendid work, and can't wait to see more!
I'll be straight with you friend, I think I like this series more than the HFHM proper stories. Can't wait for more.
No matter who's there, I'm so excited to finally see them again! Great work as always and can't wait for the next installment!
I hope we get to meet the arachnids! I've been waiting for them to show up again. That being said, I am totally loving Lily and Dana's interactions, and I am shipping them hard. I hope Dana can let go of Alex and choose to love Lily, and I'm hopping Lily can reciprocate Dana's love.
But definitely more excited to see Oregon again. I've been waiting for it to come up in the main story line again.since you first wrote about it.
I have very much enjoyed both this story and HFHM. This particular chapter was one of your best. However, I am always sad when I reach the end of a chapter because now I will have to wait for the next one.
Please keep up the excellent work, it is greatly appreciated.
I rarely leave comments other than to point out the lack of a serial comma, but I find that this series is incredible enough to merit the great inconvenience of leaving an anonymous comment from a shitty mobile phone. Well done, writeranabelle, well done indeed. Can't wait to revisit our friends in Oregon.
-Ombric
That was excellent descriptive work on an eldritch horror. Love the story so far.
Just leaving a comment because of the tag... shower sex with butt stuff. I chuckled.
“Ultimate horror often paralyses memory in a merciful way.” ― H.P. Lovecraft, The Rats in the Walls
Having survived the maelstrom of the pit, our plucky team of three head to ground.
Thank you for sharing! 5* Slainté
This story is so good. And to think, this is "just a spin-off". I love your stories. You obviously do a lot of research, and that is very well appreciated. But the way you tell your tale just draws me in and transports me to a different world. Thank you.
Somehow, the idea of Lily being reduced to a gibbering wreck is the freakiest part of this entire tale. I hope that you start bringing more cosmic aspects into your stories into the future!
I just finished where this is going, and was already hoping for what is to come! So Super excited!!
I really loved this chapter, Lily confronting her past or maybe our future.
Dana breaking the mold of her personality at HFHM.
Best I have been reading!
Congrats Annabelle
Yaaaay, I hope we're going to see who I think we are! I've been hoping they'd pop up in HFHM but this is just as good. :-)
WOWI think I know who they saw maybe is was one of the old ones like CTHULU , and l like that you did not say the car in the pit was Christine , I love it I will go into DT'S waiting for the next chapter maybe see a spider?
A zombie and succubus wanders onto the land a cantankerous, old Vietnam vet who has been hiding his family for the last five decades, what could possibly go wrong?
Wow, since book 2 where Mike and Ratu stumbled across an old one I was really intruiged by that concept. Sure, HP Lovecraft did it before, but you do it just as good, dare I say, maybe even better :)
And it was also really cool to see how a demon fixated on dreams is affected by reading the dreams of a multi-dimensional god.
Plus, I loved that Tik-Tok finally got some more to do, he may be one of the least used characters in the HFHM universe. And that's a shame!
Can't wait to see those old friends next chapter. With that and HFHM book 4 closing, this will be a copule of fun weeks!
What a delightful "twist?" is the best word i can think of made me go back and reread the last 4 chapters see what matches up. Amazing chapter can't wait for the next.
Lily going crazy was a bit confusing. There's this line, "With a little prodding, she was able to convince the succubus to take to the skies, all while she held Tick Tock in suitcase form." which suggest she was able to fly normally but later suggests she's still in some kind of trance from the past, which didn't make proper sense.
The last page is confusing, but then I remember you use literary techniques to immerse the reader into the story.
Clever girl
Is that Plymouth the one of one of Stephen King's novels?
Great storytelling as always, greetingd from a huge fan in Germany, 5 stars as for all of your stories!
You know I thought about the eldritch being manipulating time but didn't know if you'd pull it. That would explain the fluctuation they felt towards oregon that threw them off. Thanks for the chapter
I spotted two call outs, and I'm pretty much crap at seeing those so there are probably more:
The Plymouth encased in concrete is almost certainly a 1958, four-door, red Plymouth Fury with a taste for bloody revenge named Christine.
The knight who threatened Lily with silver bullets, only for her to reply "That's for werewolves," is almost exactly like a scene from the movie Love at Fist Bite.
Well done! Now I know about the “incident” Cyrus referred to in HFHM part 5. Wonder how he’ll feel if/when he meets Lily again. Finn
Wow, Time twists and an old one is odd even for your stories. But it was interesting I will say that.
wow wow wow irl
how can i be amazed further?
Your works, your words astound me, your imagination is beyond anything i have come upon, ever before. I am so into the Monsters but this side story, OMG
Goodness gracious me, that was in expected. Great time travel twist. Love the back story on Lily. You never cease to amaze. Where do you ideas come from. Great story telling. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to what comes next.
After reading the last chapter, I was confused how I had missed Lily being of Asian decent..... but this chapter cleared that up! Loving the back story, and love the amount of reasearch you are putting in to your stories!
Oh boy, shenanigans, action, and some ill-understood mayhem.
Great hallmarks of this team.
Been looking forward to revisiting Oregon for a long time.
Reading for the second time to catch up for the newest chapter Still give a dozen stars. CajunBear
Rule one of dealing with the supernatural: don't mess with the old ones. Rule two: see rule one. Repeat.
Looking at this now, from the perspective of chapter 100 in the main story, some of this has so much more meaning. Love it! ❤️
Like the time-loop, enjoying the story so far.
Anyone who hasn't read 'By His Bootstraps' by Robert Heinlein is advised to do so asap.
5* thanks for sharing.
Dixon (UK)
The Pit looks like a place from games like <Doom, Marathon and the like. Time travel I would like to see the consecuences.
As ever you dont¡'t stop surprising us, please keep in that line. And thank you for so much fun.
🤔Wait they travelled back in time with the necklace the used to locate Lilly in the first place ... So how ...
🙄I hate time travel 😖
What happened to the original story? I don't really like this side story...or whatever it is.
That was a good use of deception. I didn't know how dangerous the Eldritch monsters can be.
Four cheers for Annabelle's imagination. Hip hip hooray, huzzah, yippee, Atta girl.