All Comments on 'Frank's Daughter'

A good setup but it got a bit too summary like at the end there. Why did she cheat? Clearly it was for a long time. How long had Carolyn been dipping into the cheating lifestyle? Given she did a risk assessment before she attacked him, there seems to be potential there to explore in a story.

Not one of your better stories but it's 95% better than the stories here in LW. The last line cracked me up.

It all went south fast!

5

Grandma was the one that chose divorce over unlocking her phone.

This gets a 5 star rating because it was a bit different in the revealing process of the infidelity and because it had a humorous finish, along with it was more entertaining than the first four stories I read in this category today. You also don’t have many stories here and I hope you continue writing.

thanks

Didn't see that result at the end! Made a good story even better!

Wow! not long enough. The Bear lies it. 5 stars.

The BEAR

Nice twist with the 4 iron.

5 stars. Loved the unexpected ending

Short a 4 Iron! I liked that, enough said. Good read 5*.

Probably would have gone with a pitching wedge myself. Shorter but with a nice stiff shaft!

Any story that advocates violent assault as an entertaining form of payback is an automatic 1 star no matter how well written.

So funny some folks don't understand a lack of violence from time to time only empowers the bullies and creates more pain and suffering for the innocent. A timely beat down is often the best method to stop really bad folks. So, sometimes, you just gotta open a can of "wup-ass."

10 Big Blazing Stars, for a great story about life, justice, cheating, and truth. Lying and Coniving seldom make for a good marriage. Good Marriages are built on Love, Trust and truth, Lying and Coniving do just the opposite. Great Writing, Great Story, Great 'Life Lesson" and thanks for the Effort. Buster2U

Unique approach to a common theme.

Nicely done, except for the mugging. There are creative ways to attain the same result without the need for physical violence.

Some people just need a good ass whooping’. I’m still chuckling. Thanks for the grins!

Good one. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Fun!

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Absolutely Loved this one!! Thank you, O.K.!!!!

Never eat at a cafe called Mom's or piss off a woman named Babe.

Love the ending… great! Thanks

Good story but a bit short and flat emotionally. Thanks for sharing.

Well that's how you open up a can of whoop-ass on someone. Well played

Okay story, but the Bold font change tore me out of the reading FAST!!!

Babe should’ve finished the job so that her grandson wouldn’t be influenced every other week by his traitor slut mom and his enabler witch grandmother!

ZK

“ She's a grown woman fully capable of making her own decisions and taking responsibility for her actions."

Great to see this in a LW story. It cannot be emphasized enough!

ZK

It’s excellent to have a story where someone is loyal to Truth instead of “My daughter, right or wrong.” A truly honorable man. His reward in the afterlife will be great!

ZK

I guess Adam did not keep Babe on a short enough leash. lol

I felt a lot better about the "iron bar" being bent in the attack on the two when it was revealed to be a golf club.

Still a vicious attack, but Grandma Bear was pretty upset.

Not one of these legal events would have happened and that just pisses me off. If you’re going to change laws to further your plot, then why not change the laws to punish adulterous women by stoning? Or forced sterilization? Or working at a whorehouse in chains.

Now then, let’s talk about the fear of the mother that her husband Frank would divorce her for knowing about the affair? What kind of a marriage does she have if it’s based on fear and not love?

More misogynistic nonsense...

Great final line, a Babe can swing an iron.😁

Great story. Last line was utterly hilarious

Good one.

Quite good but just one little nit pick; 'dive' in the past tense is 'dived'. A 'dove' (pronounced 'duv') is a white bird of the pigeon family.

What purpose did the bold serve? An epilog is an epilog, it doesn’t need to shout.

Five from me, nothing there for me to complain about

Absolutely loved the "Missing 4-Iron". Never piss off a momma bear.

A full 5 stars, it was the 4 iron comment that upped the mark from 4 stars.

The story was meh except for the last sentence which turned it around. Lol.

I don't let plot and character development get in the way of the story. lol that was funny

lol funny read ty. been jamin lol poor kid

It doesn't cost a lot to replace the shaft in a golf club.

Could have been a great story . It's a shame it isn't.

Got off go a good start , nice storytelling setting the scene , drama building . And then it was a quick dash to the ending .

What happened ? Did you get bored or what ?

The storytelling fell apart . The writing became lame.

I can think of any number of authors who could add another page and a half and get 4 or 5 star rating .

I think I'm being generous giving 3 stars , 2 and a half not being possible .

Bitterly disappointed .

DK .

Thanks for posting and allowing comments .

Wow well You could see a good bit of darkness through the entire story and shows that some people dont take kind to cheating or being made a fool out of ,,, Good Story

The attack on the 2 women didn’t make sense.

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Lack of ANY conversation between Frank and Carolyn post Frank arrest detracted. As did lack of any epilogue provided info to help explain why Carolyn went off the rails so completely.

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Like so many stories, had great setup and early drama, but then petered out with rushed and incomplete ending.

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3 ***

Good Story, not outstanding. 4*

Iefistrly knew that Babe was the attacker, although I didn't guess a golf club. S very unsatisfying story, overall, but still worth four stars

JPB

3*

Unique POV from parent of a cheater. And good on Babe for preserving her putter.

Ending was great

This was an oasis in a putrid pool of stories that only get the bitch simps/cucky boys the feels....

That 4 iron will do some damage!! LOL 5/5 BRB

Good story!

I was a bit puzzled because I couldn't remember any plausible reason for Carolyn's rage, but then decided it was probably just a simple case of having become overcome by x-chromosomes.

Ben was fortunate in having his case heard by a sympathetic judge if he was given 'primary' custody of his son.

5 full stars for the "being short a 4-iron in her set of golf clubs". This is the alternative meaning of BTB: BeatTheBitch. Very well deserved payback for the two demented sluts, mother and daughter.

I figured the mugger was Babe.

It seems that among the about 20 cuck-raac tales of today, this is the only one where the husbands act with a male brain, instead of the usual sheep one. A very good, rare and realistic one, not following the endless annoying bombing cuck propaganda, so needless to say: 5+ full stars !

Nice story with a surprising ending. I also didn't expect the wife to still refuse handing over her phone under pain of divorce. Expecting something to happen as the son's so unhappy when returning from mom's/ grandma's house due to their anger- perhaps an alert to quit it or he'll seek legal remedies so the son doesn't have to go there at all. Overall, good read. 4 stars Bob

Good story but screw the political correctness. It's not spousal support, it's efffing alimony.

One very rare and "solid" BTB, that shows how these disgusting, betrayer slut wives can end, receiving the due and "hard" payback. A very good and realistic reverse side of the so called "wonderful cheting-cuck lifestyle", where the "hard" and "solid" reality shows how much dangerous such behaviours can be. Good job: 5* !

The last sentence is what did it for me. 5 stars!

I love the story telling. How did Frank’s interaction with Carolyn get so far off the rails? Had she been so volatile all through the marriage. If Frank was Missy’s father why did the wife get so angry? Was she a Chester but not in the daughter’s birth case? What is with the police arresting him? If the mother and daughter wanted to lessen the divorce situation why not state they both got out of control? Nowback to the story presentation. I love the remiss and the timing of the reveals. I love the wording, the presented selfishness of the mother and daughter. Finally I love the ending the most. A mom gets revenge of a mother/daughter skank twins….

Damn a 4 iron! It's like the missing 1/2" wrench, hard to get anything done without it. The worst part is you can never find where it went and who may have taken it. Damn! I did like the hold my beer (LOL).

Violence is needed to protect themselves.

"short a 4-iron" should have been the title for the story.

It started off great.

Then it lost steam after the arrest because you just narrated the second half.

Short a 4 iron. Nice

Um, if you visit your local Goodwill Store, or any thrift shop, you can usually find a stray 4 iron. Just sayin'.

“Carolyn and Missy stopped going out to nightclubs….”

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Quite the little clue dropped there. Obvious implication is that mother and daughter both harbored a rather “loose” interpretation of their marriage vows. Was Carolyn a cheater as well before her marriage blew up? While no actual info pointing to this deduction was in the story, her rabid reaction defending Missy and her subsequent behavior sure did suggest this likelihood. All indications from what the story related was that she did nothing to try to save her marriage, which might be interpreted as not wanting lots of dirt to be uncovered 😎

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A bit puzzling that with Ben working for his father in law and ever owning part of the business, Ben didn’t talk to Frank before dropping the divorce papers on his daughter containing the results of a lot of evidence gathering about the affair AND paternity of child #2.

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Strong story though. 4 easy ⭐️s

Tt59 is a psychopath, and a coward.

Thanks for the shout out to Babe Zaharias. Like Sam Snead she is one of the most neglected golfers in professional golf.

Go BABE

Good ending but predictable. Good twist on the father’s PIV. Only average story. Too many mistakes and name mixups. No seeming purpose to bold type Also interrupted the story flow

Memo to AnotherChapter: true about the pitching wedge but the longer shaft of the 4 iron generates more club head speed! 🤣

I have never read a story from this perspective. So very unique for me. I really enjoyed the writing. It might have been interesting to hear the stupid sluts reasons for betrayal. And I do mean both the sluts.

Literotica's cucky boys must be clutching their peals over this...🤣🤣🤣

Gotta’ love a happy ending

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Nice! I like short stories when no more is required to complete the plot. As much as I like this one, it would be a great cadidate for more pages. Still your call, good stuff!

That last paragraph was a gem! I'm not sure where the mother-in-law's anger comes from, but who wants to live with that?

Great story, I have to ask, how many swings does it take to defeat a pair of cheating sluts to admit defeat, using a #4 iron?

So, Frank and Carolyn had been married for 30 years, and he was ready to divorce her because she kept her daughter's secret, because she didn't want her daughter's mistake to lead to divorce? Then he assumes that, because his daughter made a mistake, and his wife kept it a secret, his daughter probably wasn't his daughter? Frank was, as this was written, much more loyal to his son-in-law than his own daughter. In what world does that make sense or is realistic?

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Well, actually I get it. Anony referenced thinking with a "male brain," as though men and women are diametrically opposed and, at heart, enemies. That isn't the way it's supposed to be.

Enjoyable story, especially the last line!

Nice ending twist

Thanks for writing

Oh loved the ending

oh loved that one..

Another good story where the women who felt entitled found out they weren't, Karma wins out in the end.

I love the part about being short a 4 iron, LOL. Good story.

That was great, especially the ending with the golf club! 5 stars!

Hee hee, go Babe go!

Fore!11

A decent outline for a real story, with interesting characters that would have been fun to know. Maybe someone with the wit and imagination could tell the whole story.

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Carolyn was probably the most interesting and complicated of the characters outlined. When did she learn that her daughter was a whore, a traitorous bitch wife, and knocked up? And why would she conceal that from her husband Frank? Did she sympathize with a wife who fucks around, and apparently comes to love another man? Given her daughter's stupidity, arrogance, and lack of morals and ethics, what made Carolyn think the bastard child would not eventually be discovered? And what was her plan upon her grandson being discovered? And when Frank became suspicious of his own wife's fidelity, why did Carolyn react with rage and violence rather than understanding and self confidence? Or did Carolyn too wonder who was Missy's biological father? And given Carolyn's evident lack of respect for her husband and their marriage commitment, why did she want to stay married to him? And what is she doing going out to night clubs, with her unfaithful daughter, so soon after, or during, her divorce? Apparently she finally ditched Frank completely and was trolling for some strange cock? Again?

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Several of the other characters are equally intriguing. Wow, what an opportunity missed.

I'm good with it.

Write on!

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Be well!

Not much.

There was no plot - every development was foreshadowed. No tension was created. Nothing about any of the characters was particularly engaging.

A much more rewarding story would have shown the mess they all would have found themselves in had it turned out that elder couples had each cheated on the other and produced children with inappropriate parents

@Reed — as usual, you get it totally wrong 🥳

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Frank divorced the bitch because she refused to be honest and forthcoming about THEIR daughter’s infidelity; refused to let him see their phones to assess the depth AND width of the betrayal; threaten HIM to destroy HIM in any divorce; AND because SHE physically. attacked HIM and then turned HIM into the cops. And as the story revealed…she did NOTHING to try to mitigate any of what she did.

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Yeah…it escalated real fast when slut daughter came home with divorce papers in hand. But both she and his wife lied from the start as he began to ask questions about the basis of the divorce…and when in the paperwork he finds out the daughter GOT PREGNANT by her fuck buddy, his wife didn’t even try to fake outrage…because she already knew AND HAD KEPT THAT TIDBIT FROM HER HUSBAND!

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So yeah, RR — he divorced the bitch. And you had a problem with that? Sheesh…..

Wow… Babe Didrikson Zaharias. Haven’t heard about her in a minute. Way to weave her into the story. Really enjoyed the father of the slut perspective also.

Oh how I busted a gut at your last declaration! Must have been her favorite club. She should have at least used a club she hardly ever used on the course, lol. Excellent story! Wish you'd get rid of those dot dot dots. You'd understand why if you loaded it into a text reader and listened to your own stories. I'd tell you why if you asked. 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS for the story. The ending was priceless.

I'm sorry but I won't be reading any more of your stories. There is just too much anger in them for me. Good luck with your writing.

Haha missing her 4 iron, that was great.

I have no reason to create a profile here.

Your refusal to accept anon comments hurts others which you don't seem to mind.

One of the best endings I have seen.