All Comments on 'Good Karma'

In this story it looks like some grade school kid wrote it. Doesn't the author has a clue what a coma(,) is or what its used for in writting? Far too many " -- " and "..." are used harming the content of the story.

why do writers with this type of story always have the guy marry the mother. it would be much more believable for him to marry his sister and have the mother live with them. THINK BEFORE WRITE STUPID STORIES.

I'm sure the author knows what a coma is. A comma is something completely different. If you are going to pick out writing errors then proofread your critique too.

I rather enjoyed this story. Could be continued very easily. Thank you.

Lots of erotic sex in this one, and although there were a few errors the story was very good.

Thanks for the read

Your story is fantastic bud, please ignore the "Anonymous" cowards gutless comments about an authors writing and without them able to rebuff the comment, is despicable. I totally support Authors rights bud.

this fine story! The reason Frank made his mother his wife and Lisa took her boy as her husband is that it's so damn sexy! As his mother's young husband Frank has unlimited access to her mommy-cunt, it's just a given that he can push her against the wall or bend her over the kitchen counter or climb on top of her in her bed and shove his stiff fat prick up his mother's cunt. It's understood that his prick'll be up his mom's twat more than it'll just hang between his legs! As his wife his mother's twat is not just the natural but also the legal receptacle for all the big jets of rich creamy semen the boy's got brimming in his hot young balls. Sure, a guy fucking his kid sister's cute little slit is fine, all big brothers should give in to their natural urge to plant their prick up between their sis's slender legs. But fucking mom is in a class by itself. It's a boy blowing his balls up his own damn birth canal, where he was once a little baby. Maybe making a baby in the same cunt he came out of.

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It was the last week she was to spend with her husband. 3 days later, as Lee was leaving work, he saw Anthony Giordano shot in cold blood. The gunman saw him at the last minute but Lee insisted he do his civic duty and went to the police. He gave an excellent description of the shooter and they were sure they knew who it was. Lisa was terrified for her husband's safety.

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Do his civic duty?! What a fucking retard, damn! Thats not even thinking about your family at all! What if the guy had decided to take it out on his family first? Hell, Im surprised his wife didn't shoot his ass first to protect her kids since he obviously didnt give a shit about them! Damn.

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"Good to hear, lover," Lisa laughed. "So go ahead and get Mommy off." She slid the negligee away from her body, leaving only the stockings and mules. "Do it, you motherfucker!"

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You know, in a way its distracting from the story... I keep thinking, what the hell kind of shoes are mules? Lol ;)

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"What are we going to do?" Lisa asked one morning. "I don't want to stop fucking him -- or you ..." She said to Lisa "... but folks might get suspicious."

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....and why would anyone get suspicious? ...and if they did, so fucking what? Lol.

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"We're moving to California," Frank told his family. "You keep your wedding band -- I'll have one made that matches and sis can stay with us as -- well, as my sister," He laughed. "We'll start new lives there and live as husband and wife -- if that's what you want."

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If I won 12 mil I'd sure move to some place better, and cheaper, than Cali! Lol. That money wont go far there, rofl! We'd be moving out of country, thats for sure!! Hell, buy a nice, big yacht and travel the world!

Right, cause it makes more sense to be 26 and married to a 51 or 42 year old with a younger spinster sister as opposed to pretend to be married to 18yr old with a widowed mother

Also how is the son 26, the mom married to the dad for 25 years, yet only 16 years older than her son?

26+16=42-25=17 or 16 given the way age is calculated if step mom which is never mentioned, or she gave birth to her son 10years before she was born

Needs better thought on timelines and basic logic

just destroyed the charm

That killed a beautiful story for me. 1 star so now it's just another boring fuck story...Blah, Blah, Blah

an "ending at the beginning" kind of reader. No suspense, anticipation, etc. etc. 1*