by scouries
Ah, a nice combination of sentiment and lust. A typical scouries protagonist. And a big chunk of suspense. I want more!
scouries, looks like another of your great stories. I'm eagerly waiting for chapter two. Thank You. Ronnie W.
Nothing about the guy suggests cop, so right from the start we have problems. The rest of the characters feel more like caricatures than real people. The attempts at humor fall flat. The buildup to the sex is contrived and difficult to imagine as plausible. Combining that makes what could otherwise be a hot sex scene almost sterile. By the time the speck of humanity creeps into Kathy at the end to give her more than one dimension, it's really too late. You lean on the incest to carry your stories, and it shows. JPM
Jim, it looks to me as though you have another winner and I can't wait for the next chapter! Taking into account that this was a piece of fiction, I can't understand the reasoning behind the anonymous comments of JPM. Pete.
Scouries, Just awesome, too damn good. You just keep getting better, keep it up. Can't wait for part two, and more.
What a great start to this story Looking forward to the next chapter. Keep us up and hot!!!!!!!
I am still in awe of your creativity. I love everything that you write, but this one is totally fresh and exciting. Keep them coming .. we love reading your work. Great job!!
You are the best author on this website. Thank you for a fascinating tale well told. It would make a better movie than \\\"The Pirates OF The Caribbean\\\" and I cant wait for the next chapter
You write whore stories much better than Stephen King. When is this going to be made into a movie? This story \\\"scared\\\" my panties right off. Thanks, Mona.
Hey Scouries, you writing your own comments again, the previous two look like they were written by the same person, you!
You really are a pathetic little man.
Oh, your story, I gave it a 2. That's about all it was worth.
Another well written Scouries story and the one-liners were very funny!
Jim my friend I waited patiently and you never let me down. I am so in love with your writing I'm like a child on Christmas morning waiting to you to give me the gift of your stories. Keep up the good work.
I love your stories....they just get better and better....keep writing for those of us that are always looking for more wonderful work from you.
Your narrative is great Scouries! Seems to me that you are maturing. Erotica with balls!!! Please do continue with this, OK?
I like your writing style. No nonsence. to the point. and you can spell.
hey i loved it it was kinky thats what i like keep it up u help me alot shit im still horny
to most of us, that Jim Scouries writes very well, most interesting erotica, and lots of different situations, all of which have some touch of reality, yet are extreme enough to cast them in the realm of absolute fiction. The person who can't bother to sign a name (8/20/07 comments) is probably leaving multiple negatives and low votes as some weird sort of vendetta against Mr. Scouries. That should be disallowed - comments should only be allowed from people who sign in, and once a comment is made, no more should be allowed. I like this work - hospital sex always gets me in the mood. There are so many stories about hospital sex, but they always turn me on, and I wish I had the balls to make the first move. Better still I really wish I'd get some of those hornies who would make the first move with me. I'm really looking forward to Ch. 2. Thanks, Jim, for another great read!
....since you still hide behind anonymity, afraid to even fill out a member profile less intrusive than the friggin' census. And since you don't believe in "conversations", per se , than you could never leave a record of your interpretations anyway, so are as good as anonymous in that way as well. Scouries has written some good stories and some regurgitated crap as well, as do virtually all authors. He can write exceedingly well. Not as well as he sometimes seems to imply though. Comments are sycophantic to the extreme.
Sufice it to say that this story got the first "5" I've ever scored on a story. It was well written, and erotic. I loved it. Thank you for writing it.
Sir_Erotica
Loved it, loved it. Man you always write a great story. Keepem comin. Thanks for sharing.
I thoroughly enjoyed this story: more than once I laughed out loud, and I thought the final lengthy "story" that Johnnie tells was quite poignat. The scene was a turn-on more because it was seductive--obviously so for Johnnie, but for the doctor too--than for the sex itself. I hope there really is a part 2!
I have never laughed so hard reading porn. The first page was hilarious. The sex wasn't bad but the humor was WAY better. Kinda weird now that i think about it.
coming back to this story. this must be the 5th or 6th time I have read it.
This story has it all;
humor, eroticism, tenderness...going to read part 2😃😃.
Typical Scouries. Good Great and brutilly honest which makes him irresistible. A style that turns anyone on.