by Mentalcase
I really like the way you haven't rushed the story along, cant wait to read more.
Unlike some people, and I have to agree with them sometimes, I like the build-up. It's like foreplay. It makes the climax (both kinds) much better. Keep it going. Ron
no guy is going to just sit there talking to his sister nude with a hardon doesn't anyone here have locks on thier doors with four sisters i'm sure he does
This is a great story. Keep going and don't worry about the negative comments, they have no imagination. They just want instant gratification in the first five lines.
Good luck
I love the build-up, and the pace is just perfect.
I can't wait to read the coming chapters.
Jerry in Washington State, USA - I loved this chapter. I loved the special bonding between Mike and Sarah. I love her motherly nuturing side and her sexy side. The sex between them was especially hot since it showed how much they love each other.
Love the story; love the humor. But, the best parts may be your bizarre phrases such as the one above. You are a talented but sick little puppy...
i had the most intense orgasm in my life! normally I last longer than half an hour, but I lasted like 10 mins!
"The part of Mike's brain that usually didn't speak directly to him, the moral side, suddenly woke up at that point and wondering just what the hell was going on. The voice sucker punched it, knocking it out again."
"The voice sucker punched it, knocking it out again."
Extremely funny!
This is a wonderful chapter I'm glad it was Sarah that made something happen. It felt natural and you didn't rush actual sex. The only thing I found a little strange was jumping back and forth from what he felt to her and back. But thats minor the quirky things he says is great keep up the wonderful job :)
I am actually impressed with the story line. I agree with someone above here, you are talented but sick. I did imagine wishing I had a brother who fantasized about me, but it's harmless simply because I think if I had one, I don't think it would ever go there. So far, so good. The story is enthralling and you can probably get it published. I've read worst, but haven't finished reading this one. 4 sisters seems like a load though.
Nah...I don't think you're sick at all. You're not some puritanical, inhibited individual. What you are is creative, sensual, sexy, and exciting.
I actually felt that this could actually happen. You made it seem so natural that I wonder if this is a true story. Sarah is portrays a lot of roles and does it seamlessly. She's a mother figure to all of them. She is a caring sister to Mike and shows she can be a friend as well.
I actually don't have any criticism for this chapter. The humor is well-placed and the emotions are very real.
Keep it up.
This might sound odd but I cried to this in the sense because of the love between the brother and sister. I loved how it didn't turn into wham bam thank you maam. It was more about love, fufillment, and beauty. Things I hope to learn about someday. Keep Writing! :)
I just found your work. I thought the set up was a tad unrealistic since they kinda just jumped into the sexual hijinks. The writing is fantastic though, so I just suspend my disbelief and enjoy.
and then I had to reach for a glass of cold water.
How did you make such an eroticly taboo subject and situation seem soooooo normal, sexy and HOT?!!! Hell, it was "romantic" as well. YOU'RE DAMN GOOD! It's YOUR universe master and I'm just a Peeping Tom passing through! Great job!
Yo ive been a fan of this site for years and of this subject just as long. I havent been here for awhile and this was the firsr story i began to read and i must say DUDE THIS IS THE ISH
Wow, where was a sister like Sarah when I was growing up? She is a very good helper, clearly going above and beyond the call of duty here. Very impressive. Keep doing what you do MC and we'll keep reading.
lol his cure is making sweet sweet love to his sister. Seriously love the way you write. I really think this would make an awesome book. your plot, everything, pulls me in and makes me want more. I didnt realize till I started to read you stuff, that it is much more. . . . . fulfilling i think is the word, than the typical wham bam stories on this site. Thank you, humor and eroticism go perfect together lol
On my second read through of your story and it's still good! Especially The Voice, which I find to be hilarious! That is probably the most original story idea I've ever seen on Literotica.
I'd seriously LOVE to see a lot more stories in the incest section along this vein, with a brother and multiple sisters. There are a few, just not very many :(. I need to compile a list!
So many incest stories I've read seem to end up being: "Oh! Wait, are you jerking off? You know... if you want... I could help you with that?"
I guess it's an unavoidable situation though. Not very many other ways to enter that kind of situation. I still love this story though.
umm....i loved the story...but what i don't get is why is the title named as "just the six of us" when there are only 5 characters....mike and 4 sisters....
p.s- i just started reading....currently chapter 4
This is just awesome! The fact that you are able to
have such detailed erotic content while having a good
story line is simply wonderful! And the comedy... oh
God the comedy. I died laughing when the voice
sucker punched his morals.
When she said he could touch her I came really hard
Thank you for that amazing piece of writing. Im looking forward to more!
This is so good, still reading it from time to time after all these years... Keep writing.
Its like this,Mike is obviously schizo with the voice in his head,but after Sarah helped him I hope that means the voice will eventually go away,but maybe not.Sarah it seems is the sweet caring older Sister that Mike can turn to now that she knows his secrets.Danni in a nutshell is the typical reverse psycology girl,she obviously is attracted to Mike and loves him,but she uses mean and hurtful things to get Mike to notice her which she so desperately craves,but she tries to pretend she is this strong arrogant tough bitch that looks HOT but underneath she is a vulnerable emotional scared girl,that is too afraid to tell Mike she loves him deeply.
Emma and Beth are pretty close to the same,they are outgoing,but shy for the most part.Now lets look at this objectively,we have 5 Siblings ,4 of which are Girls,and 1 Boy who has a second voice in his head,and may have Evil Clown tendencies,but all 5 Sibs have issues due to their parents deaths.Now Sarah helped Mike by giving him a handjob and he found temporary peace,and Sarah gained some confidence by Mike telling her she was Sexy,so they are now recovering somewhat,that leaves Beth,Danni,& Emma,who are still effected,so I am not sure how they can get over their issues,but we'll see in the next few chapters.All-in-all this story is exciting and can't wait to see how this plays out.
Lol I fucking loved it when you mentioned the Ace Ventura 'Oh Yeah Can You Feel That' celebration dance!!!!
Been a couple of years since I last read the story. Rereading it now. Loved the pacing in this one. Like Mike and Sarah said. Naughty and sensual more than horny and hardcore sexual.
"No voice."
And, "No nightmares."
Very perceptive and very authentic character development.
I know this is a very old series, and the author may not be on the platform any longer, but I hope the story continues to show the progress in character development this foreshadows.
Even Sarah's deep empathy makes the highly unusual seem not so highly unlikely.
So far, so good.
First time reading this series...it just gets better and better.
Who better to help him out the FIRST time than his oldest sister, Sarah??!! Like she said, she has helped him with everything else in his life, why not this. I LOVE how she is so understanding, and she actually was into it as much as he was, enjoying him touching her. It went MUCH further than I tho't it would...made it even better!!
Obvious question, who will be next?? If it IS Danni, it WILL completely change their dynamic...I think she is attracted to him...like kids on a playground being mean to each other to cover their attraction...
But, any would do, this is going to be quite the adventure!!
Five**5**Stars, oh, yeah!!!!!🌌🌌🌌🌌🌌🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥💯