by Harddaysknight
You're sorta milking this story a little to much don't you think? I mean 18 chapters! It's getting very highschool-ish and very fucking boring! Every week the chapters keeps going up, I stopped reading after chapter 4 or five. ... Boring boring boring boring jibberish rambling bullshit story. The story is ok I think it was written nicely but you don't seem to know when to stop. Chapter after chapter.
Waited 18 chapters for sex; this is Literotica, isn't it?
Interesting writer, but lackluster with the erotic portion. Finish it.
I find the story enjoyable but I think that most of our readers are getting a bit hung on it. My favorite novels have a thousand pages so no trouble here. But you have to also notice that it is like reading a Marvel comic book collection rather than a novel!
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great story and keep writing.
I just wish the chapters came a bit more often. But, beggars cannot be choosers right?
I'm so sick of this story. It's getting insanely boring. Don't you think it's time to move on to the next catagory? Loving wives, romance... Shit ! Anything would be better. The story is good don't get me wrong but it's too much, sometimes less is more. Just end the fucking story already shit.
I would think that a story in novels and novellas should be expected to go on for a long time. I for one love the long ones.
we welcome introduction of Jordan.
The bit about staying in the same Hotel room just doesn't fly. Pretty hypocritical attitude.
Of course they cannot sleep in the same room in a hotel. At home with 4 bedrooms and as many as six people in the house including the parents, nobody outside the house knows who sleeps where. In a hotel room with one room and assumedly one bed or one man and one woman, a photo of her exiting or entering and staying for hours will shout slut! Though these two would keep it platonic, nobody would believe that. Everyone involved would lose social status.
I don't know what you are thinking with Steve saying he would let her dad wail on him. I don't care how much you love or respect someone, you don't let anyone physically abuse you. That's male or female.
She should go to the same place as the Sparta car dealer with roaming hands
For New Year's this year, I started rereading the series. Once the suspension of disbelief is firmly in place, this is a fun ride!
Thank you very much for your efforts! Gotta go, more chapters to read tonight :)
Steve as never had a girl friend,nor Gwen a boyfriend,yet he makes her howl like a wolf,get real.
Given some of the criticism you'd think a lot of people had never heard of 'fiction' before.
They need to lighten up and go with the flow.