All Comments on 'Loosening Up Bk. 04 Ch. 11-15'

I feel u rushed things wit Dave and his mother. Especially wit the tricking him at night part. One second he's confused and upset bout what happened then a few lines later he folds like a deck of cards and accpets it, just like that.

I think the transition would've had more weight if say Aaron had crossed that line first, and then him and the rest of the Circle could've worked on gettin Dave to see things their way. Would've built up the tension more, maybe even adding a few minor negative interactions over how stubborn he was bein. Ultimately ending wit Dave realizing how foolish he was being and finally crossing that line wit his mother. Only this time it would be willingly and not a trick.

But that's just my 2 cents. Overall a good story so far.

Sorry, that part’s just gross and unnecessary. Fine, let Elise be there - but she shouldn't fuck her sons or eat their cum. Love the story, but I really wish you hadn't gone there - I just have to skip those parts.