by Ignoble
Makes me wish I had a young'n and a hot babysitter. Great story, just enough info to make you read faster until you could get to the good parts. Well done.
terrific story , the tension in the first page is thrilling followed by an amazing quickie . excellent writing .
Great writing. Excellent job. There isn't one single thing that makes a story stand out: There's the writing itself (words spelled correctly, proper grammar, etc), but then there's the pace, the character development, the story arc and the actual" tale" of the story. It has to be something to gain and hold the attention of the reader. It needs to be interesting, and since this is an erotica site, it has to be ...well, erotic.
You were firing on all cylinders with this one. Enough character development to explain the motivation of each of the three people involved, without boring your readers. There was suspense, a bit of drama, and, of course, the sex was "hot".
The flip side of a well-written story (if it's a curse, it's a beneficial one) is that it leaves your readers wanting more. Especially when it ends on a note like this one did. What happens next, now that Lacey has awoken the bi-curiousity of Karen? How did young Lacey come to embrace her own sapphic nature? Has she had sex with any other women for whom she's babysat? Lots of questions a reader could ask, but all of them come back to whether or not you care to expand/continue with this storyline.
Hope you do.
Interesting story. Love the GirlonGirl storys. This one is very well written. Thank You.
why would she be worried if she already knew hubby had made a pass at the sitter,she knew that wouldve come first
Now Lacey must have the other forbidden lover the husband instead treating her employee like shit. She should given her temptation of what all he wanted is her.
Great story!!! Erotic lesbian action and thrill of hubby seeing on video made this one a 5*
Love good lesbian love stories, Lacey's my kinda lesbian girl because she loves pussies and not sad begging Male testosteronous.
sad begging Male testosteronous?
Both the husband and Wife are sleaze bags - one for asking the other one for acting upon it.
Man hater much
Fantastic, what a sexy fun read, well put together, nice character set up and believable