by JulianDelacourt
I don't understand the "I'm Lisa." line. Will you explain. Thanks.
This true story was told from Andy's point of view when, in reality, Lisa is the story teller. Andy is the angel.
Might try skipping the "trying to be clever" part and just write the story. It read OK right up until the last sentence and that confused the whole story.
I'm sorry some are confused by the ending. With as many confused comments I've received, I've gotten just as many messages complimenting the end and 'my twist'. As a critic friend of mine once said, 'if half the people love it and half hate it, you're doing it right.' At least it made you scratch your head, think and promoted discussion which is what art is all about. Not 'trying to be clever', just trying new forms of writing. I stand by my decision to switch POV at the end. Again, thanks for reading and for your comments.
I thought it was rather well done... write the story from "HIS" point of view and reveal that it was written by the recipient of his "attention"... GOOD JOB!