All Comments on 'Temporary Boyfriend Ch. 02'
by SteveWallace
- 15 Comments
Ambul29 days agoTerrific idea for a story and I love it so far. Kind of a Pygmalion theme. The author has gotten off to a great start and we know quite a bit about both the main characters. I can’t wait for more of the shopping trip and see the butterfly emerge!
Weissbiermann28 days agoI love the buildup with Taylor, but who is Jill? Even for our player, that was abruptly out of left field.
Anonymous28 days agoI can’t write so appreciate others work. Like where the story is developing. I would like to see a bit longer chapter, possible 2 pages instead of one and a paragraph. It just feels sort of off with the abrupt ending on the second page.
Niceguy200028 days agoI enjoyed this more than the first chapter.
I hope you keep it fairly sweet, I'd hate for Taylor to become a total slut...just an occasional one.
texster28 days agoI get it…but players aren’t actually so self-aware that they recognize their narcissism, and aren’t also fashion-forward couture experts…but even if we accept all that, you’re going to tell me that the assistant is actually a Laney Briggs a la Rachael Leigh Cook (She’s All That)? So we have a double unicorn meeting another unicorn. Not saying I won’t read it, just saying it’s rather difficult to suspend my disbelief on this one…
Spyder2327 days agoWe know what’s going to happen so the writing is what’s important. So far, so good. 5 stars.
Anonymous27 days agoEmotionally damaged, but seemingly decent guy.
Depending on how it goes from here this could be quite a nice story.
Anonymous27 days agoI assume they will get together at the end, she loosens up and he can care for someone who cares for him. That's ok for the ending, I'll enjoy the ride getting there. Keep up the stories.
Anonymous27 days agoJust hope you are not any other author who are into shaved pussies. Taylor is perfectly suited to have a natural full bush. That would make her sexier.
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