All Comments on 'The Princess and the Whore'

While I realize you have a lot of submissions, you really do need to work on your sentence structure. I counted 10 or 11 sentences in this story alone that need help. Maybe look into a class or two, it would really help. Remember - quality over quantity. Always.

Quite enjoyable, thank you, BrettJ! As for your writing quality, it compares quite well with the others on Lit. Mistakes are infrequent, and the stories are worth much more than we pay you. All these Lit. writers must strike a balance between their available time and the quality of their writings. Few can afford the price of Perfection.

great plot ideas ,

could have developed and played with this storyline and these protagonists much , much more

could have coached her husband up. What a spoiled brat. The slut cousins and pimp mother.

Story is an amusing bit of fluff.