by SimonDoom
Nice story! I see big time incest in the siblings' future. The question that is bugging me, though, is what was the movie?
So nice an innocent game like " wandering hands" can give siblings a segue into what the latently desire.
It's possible to get a lot of story into a few words and this is one of the better ones, thank you.
I don't usually venture into I/T but since this is for the 750 project...
This was well written and very sensual in the confines of the limited wording. It was actually a little more descriptive than I imagined it would be considering the word count but was very well described none-the-less.
Great job.
Another movie date where sis gets Joey off would be a nice bookend to this story.
This is absolutely wonderful. Look at all the people who have favored this, Simon! It was short and snappy, but it contained a great deal of detail. Beautifully done! Write on! Your audience is waiting for more...
Wow! I'm so wet from such a short story, that doesn't usually happen. Thank you. Please finish it. 🤤
In spite of a well-written piece, using explicit incestual sex will always win the cheap plaudits. But the focus of the 750-word contest is erotica - not cheap tricks. Me thinks you missed the point.
Hardy in story line at all the writing again felt forced and there really wasn't any sex involved so I really wouldn't say it was incest when it was just hands used I'm starting to think all your stories is going to feel forced which is not good if you ever hope to keep writing be glad you just started not too many years ago and writing in a word that people are scared to say how they really feel about your stories well I'm different I'm not scared ill be honest with you on your stories every time and sometimes the truth hurts but it is what it is like I said thus far your stories are all forced and trashy I have read enough to know you don't know how to write a decent story even a fantasy story so you shouldn't try until you learn what it takes to write a decent story
Great story - this needs another chapter.
I am of the opinion that if someone wants to write and have their story published on this or any other site, then go for it, and encourage them to do so.
Ref Mfkndragon's comment however - one sentence, no punctuation, 155 words, and not even a full stop (period). Then I checked and the profile is banned. Not surprising really !!!
OneOldFart690, you beat me to it, re: Mfkndragon's comment. It was so painful to read, I felt I needed to take a nap halfway through. I also wonder, after reading some of the comments, if people understand how the 750-word project works. Anyway, it's tough to do, but I enjoyed it!