All Comments on 'Wire-Pulling Pt. 02'

I did not rate this story because I consider 8 pages too long, even if it is a super sexy hairy pussy mom story worthy of a five rating. TMI to get the story told!

Thanks for the storyline. I am enjoying it. Looking forward to more adventures.

waiting for ch 3

This is very entertaining, looking forward to chapter 3

this anoyn guy is a compleate joke and idiot tbh i loved it altho i hated were he left the girl to die tbh u should have had him save her and i hope theres way more to come i wanna see wat happends at the end

I enjoyed the story because it’s more than sex and to me it’s like a novel waiting on the next series. Beautiful work

Awesome. Eagerly waiting for the next chapter

Great story waiting for the rest of the tale 5stars all the way

I have to commend you on your vast knowledge of tech and spy equipment. I've enjoyed every bit of this story, and I eagerly await the next installment!

Assuming the entire story has been written, you need to say in the preface how many chapters in total. The tags should definitely include the dom/sub tag....

So far, great. How the next installment comes soon. Also would be nice to know how many they're will be in total.

Excellent storyline and quite well written. Please, please get yourself a proof-reader. And please decide if Michael is Micheal...

@Andyfarquar Yeah, I know. I got a proofreader for the edited version that's up for sale. Cost me round about three hundred bucks, and he caught the constant "Micheal" vs "Micheal" mistakes, as well as a few others, but there were still quite a few typos left.

I agree with the comments re the technical research. The only thing is the young guy has a lot of life experience for someone his age. Even being a genius. The MC character angst is well done. When he was going over how to deal with mom, my mind was screaming "just effen talk to her" LOL.

Anxiously awaiting next installment.

Very well written. My only advice is don’t be like Taylor Sheridan and wait till no one gives a damn to post the next segment of the story.

@Anonymous

Not my choice, really. I submitted the completed story about two WEEKS ago. It's stuck as "pending review" ever since. No notice, no message, no responses, nothing. I don't know of anything I could do to speed that process up.

Well done in so many ways, but the MC constantly holding the "idiot ball" needs to be redeemed, it is a weakness, as he is not showing a lot of character growth, nor is he showing much growth with is mom and their relationship. You mentioned their embrace once, you should have bolded that more, metaphorically. Seriously, he needs to hug her and hold her, literally or figuratively, for a long time one or three times already, and a lot more in the future.

Needs more eroticism.

Very good, though, I actually have faith my concerns will be paid off, and that I am about to read that, as you have already written the next chunk! I know, I know, character arcs aren't done yet...

Really enjoying myself, thanks for posting!

Loving this story but the MC seems dense at times.